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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Is the end of the second sentence properly worded?

While the combined army marched toward Thorbardin, Fistandantilus used the hostile emotions of both the plainsmen and the Neidar to continue to fuel the war. However, the archmage planned on abandoning his forces to journey to the fortress of Zhaman, which was his true goal.
  

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for clarification, perhaps: abandoning his forces, to journey to... Without the comma it could be interpreted that the forces themselves were going to make the journey

— Philip

  • for clarification, perhaps: abandoning his forces, to journey to...
  • Without the comma it could be interpreted that the forces themselves were going to make the journey
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for clarification, perhaps: abandoning his forces, to journey to...
Without the comma it could be interpreted that the forces themselves were going to make the journey
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Thanks for your help, how about this revision: However, the archmage planned on abandoning his forces and journeying to the fortress of Zhaman, which was his true goal.
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