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This is my motivation letter for Master's programm. I need to make sure that everything is ok.

I would like to apply for the ..... in October 2013. My aim is to work in an international field related to Business Economics and Management. Therefore I would like to gain knowledge of deeper principles in Management, Organization and Business Economics and also practical skills to analyze specific business issues and gain a solid basis for quantitative analysis. I believe the (University) is the best place to achieve my career objectives; it has an integrated manner of learning and studying, beside the university is considered to be the best University in Spain by the 2012 QS World University Rankings.
I have graduated in year 2012 (The University), from the Faculty of World Economics and Trade and I got a specialist degree in World Economics. I was an active student during my period in the University, involved in many event and organization, as I was a member of the circle, discussing Current Issues in Global Economy. I had improved my English at the Thanet College in the UK during summer 2009 and at The Course in Translation from 2011 to 2012. My academic performance has been always on top of class. I have been working for almost two years for an American company (name), I spent the first year on the reception, where I could see all departments and the work of the whole office and then I was promoted to become the Customer Service Specialist.
I am confident with the educational profile that I acquired as well as the experience combined with my knowledge will be an important asset for my realization in the field of Management, Organization and Business Economics. This Master’s degree will help to strengthen my leadership skills and develop instruments to facilitate the management of such sophisticated and complex organizations as businesses can be.
I am eager to get new challenges and ways to improve myself; I also have good interpersonal skill that enabled me, not only to work as an independent but also to work in groups, which is significant for this master’s degree. I have the pleasure to meet with different people with different culture and background. I can also communicate in three foreign languages: English, Spanish and German, in addition to my basic Russian.

The reason for choosing this specific Master Program comes from the fact that in the near future I would like to get to know more things regarding how to improve the strategic management of businesses in the turbulent and competitive environment of the present day. I already got some ideas in my head, but unfortunately until now I did not have the right knowledge and the right tools for strengthening my position. And that is why I know that this Master Program would be an excellent starting point for me.
I hope this application will receive your favorable consideration and I will be happy to provide additional information you may need. You can reach me by phone on (number) or by e-mail on (e-mail). I look forward to receive your reply.

Thanks!