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Lois Meza Posted 22 years ago
Grammar
Is my sentence structure correct or could it use a face lift?
We already have 25 deserving customers receiving the first wave of our delicious cookies that have been mailed within the last week.
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I'm intrigued by the use of the word 'deserving'. Does this mean that other customers do not deserve to receive the goods they have presumably paid for? The sentence is a bit 'long-winded'.
- I'm intrigued by the use of the word 'deserving'.
- Does this mean that other customers do not deserve to receive the goods they have presumably paid for?
- The sentence is a bit 'long-winded'.
- I would say something like The first delivery of our delicious cookies went out last week to 25 customers.
- or 25 customers received their first deliveries of our delicious cookies last week.
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I'm intrigued by the use of the word 'deserving'. Does this mean that other customers do not deserve to receive the goods they have presumably paid for?
The sentence is a bit 'long-winded'.
I would say something like
The first delivery of our delicious cookies went out last week to 25 customers.
or
25 customers received their first deliveries of
The sentence is a bit 'long-winded'.
I would say something like
The first delivery of our delicious cookies went out last week to 25 customers.
or
25 customers received their first deliveries of
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