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Nightmare Academy Review Text I got review text assignment for Eid holiday, i could choose any kind of books i want for my review text, because i like fiction books so i chose Nightmare Academy : Monster Hunters ( Nightmare Academy : Charlie’s Monsters (the UK version of Monster Hunters) ). Nightmare Academy : Monster Hunters is a fantasy novel written by Dean Lorey about a boy named Charlie Benjamin and his best friends Theodore Dagget and Violet Sweet. The story focuses on how Charlie and his friends repel the forces of the Named, the most powerful creatures in the Netherworld. Nightmare Academy : Monster Hunters, was awarded best children’s novel of the year 2006 by the SCIBA. They’re published in over 20 countries and are currently in development at Universal Studios. Dean Lorey was inspired to write Nightmare Academy, his first series for young readers, by his personal enthusiasm for imagined worlds and video games. He lives in Calabasas, California, with his wife, Elizabeth, and their sons, Chris (first reader for the Nightmare Academy trilogy) and Alex (then too young to read). Honestly when i saw the book cover, i was not intresting at all to this book but what had changed my mind when I read the synopsis, i got an electric signal to buy this book. The way they’ve sold this book by placing a very interesting subtitle is working until now, eventhough this book is unpopular as Twilight series or Harry Potter series. The novel begins in a small town describing the life of Charlie Benjamin. Charlie doesn't socialize, and unknowingly brings Nethercreatures into his room when he has a nightmare. One night, Charlie brings a Silvertongue into his room. Charlie wakes up before the Silvertoungue kills him, and sees a team of three people, Rex, Tabitha, and Pinch attempting to bring the creature back to where it belongs. After the fight, Charlie's parents meet the team. Pinch explains that Charlie has the Gift, which allows him to open portals into the Nether and bring creatures across them. Charlie's gift is too strong, which can become dangerous. Pinch suggests that Charlie follow them to the Nightmare Division, who will decide what should be done with such a dangerous boy. Charlie's mother reluctantly allows him to go. At the Nightmare Division, the Director instructs Charlie to open a portal. Charlie proceeds to accidentally open a portal to the Named, which are huge powerful beasts. Chaos ensues, and Barakkas, one of the four named creatures of the nether, reaches out his hand and attempts to enter. Charlie quickly closes the portal, which cuts Barakkas's arm off, including his bracer. After a debate about Reducing (a process that removes IQ points in order to lower gifted peoples power) Charlie, the Headmaster brings him to the Nightmare Academy. There, Charlie meets two classmates, Theodore and Violet. The school trains two different groups, the Banishers and the Nethermancers. Banishers, like Rex, fight and hold off Nethercreatures whereas Nethermancers, like Tabitha, open portals to send them back. Students who lose their Gift are trained as Facilitators, who provide help to the other two. After meeting the Trout of Truth (a creature that determines whether you are a Banisher or a Nethermancer), Charlie finds out that he is a Double Threat, a combination of both a Banisher and Nethermancer. Charlie is then taken by the Headmaster to Charlie's old house. Verminion, another of the Named who was portalled to Earth some years ago, kidnaps his parents and tells him to exchange his parents for the bracer. Charlie, Rex, Tabitha, and the Headmaster then go to find the Hags of the Void. The Hags of the Void, in return for Rex's memories of his parents, allow Charlie to go through the Gorgon Maze to find the Shadow(a thing which helps find what you want the most). At the end of the maze, the Shadow fills Charlie, allowing him to find his parents. Charlie's shadow now points to his parents' exact location. The group tries to find his parents, and arrives in a volcano. Verminion tricks Charlie into opening a portal, allowing Barakkas to enter. After the incident, Charlie, Violet, and Theodore steal Barakkas's bracer from the Nightmare Academy to exchange his parents. Brooke, a Facilitator, tags along, and they manage to bring themselves back to the volcano(Krakatau mountain). Charlie tries to trick Barakkas and Verminion by pretending to exchange himself and the bracer for his parents. Verminion doubts Charlie, and exposes his plan. While Violet and Theodore finds his parents and tries to rescue them, Charlie causes the two Named to fight and flees with Brooke. While they are running, Brooke opens a portal, proving that she still has the Gift. The two jump through the portal back to the Academy. Meanwhile, Barakkas has his bracer back. Both of the Named reminded each other that they both have to be alive to summon the fifth, more powerful Named with their Artifacts. The Headmaster hides Charlie's parents from the Named, and Charlie, with his two best friends, Theodore and Violet goes into the beach and reiterate how they will be together all the way. I have to say this book is good for young readers. When the story began, i felt like i was in another world, This novel really pulled me into the world of imagination filled with wonderful and exciting adventures. The stories were bright, intriguing, and ultimately satisfying. Nightmare Academy : Monster Hunters is really awesome, in some instances this book works, i feel a whole new level of intensity and excitement by the time i get to the end. I was surprised and very happy to know the end of the story take a background in Indonesia in krakatau mountain. The most I like is the special power possessed by the character, they can open portals or exterminate monsters with tremendous force, or like Charlie who has those two powers. Actually when I read this book it sort of reminds to Harry Potter story, because the characterizations of the story a little bit similar, with the boy who has a power to defeat his ultimate enemy and 2 friends who support him, i think Dean lorey and J.K Rowling have the same thoughts about what’s going on whit their own main character but the characteristic is totally different. And i’m a little bit unsure with the character of Charlie, at the first page of the book i imagined him as the boy who is vulnerable and underdog but at the end of the story he became a hero who can save all the human race. I mean it doesn’t make sense at all. Overall this book is worth to be purchased, because the price for this book is not a problem, the real problem is you won’t know when you have to stop to read this book. I can assure you that this book will rock your world through brilliant imagination.