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Judocallin Posted 16 years ago
Business & Finance
Is my memo correct?
I am a student of a Business Communication class and asked to write a memo. Our assignment assumes that we are a head of a hypothetical Accounting Department and asking our Training Director to sponsor a Writing Course for seven of my staff. Here, I am also recommending someone to conduct the Writing Course. Please tell me comments, suggestions, and details omitted. All the names here are made-up. Thank you.
Date: September 21, 2010
To: John Rovir Labatorio, Training Director
From: Arnold Q. Justiniana, Accounting Department
Subject: Writing Course Needed
Our Accounting personnel is in need of a writing course. There have been evidences of writing deficiencies, as shown by our Accounting Personnel. Although they show excellent technical skills, these don't carry in their writing. They need help.
>They lack training in clear writing-word selection.
>Their sentence design are hard to follow.
>Their message grammar are illogical.
>They have wrong usage of punctuation.
May I request that seven of my staff to undergo a writing course. I recommend those who have been working with us for not less than five years.
>Jesicca Caballero
>Kenneth Kathleen Hufancia
>Kim Duca
>Sarah Jade Hernandez
>Jet Villamor
>Charliemagne Posugac
>Raiza Joy Sarte
I suggest that Professor Meljohn Tatel to be the one to conduct the writing course. He has been conducting a writing course since year 2000 and has gained excellent recognition in many companies. In fact, he has won nobel prize, upon writing a book for correct writing.
Date: September 21, 2010
To: John Rovir Labatorio, Training Director
From: Arnold Q. Justiniana, Accounting Department
Subject: Writing Course Needed
Our Accounting personnel is in need of a writing course. There have been evidences of writing deficiencies, as shown by our Accounting Personnel. Although they show excellent technical skills, these don't carry in their writing. They need help.
>They lack training in clear writing-word selection.
>Their sentence design are hard to follow.
>Their message grammar are illogical.
>They have wrong usage of punctuation.
May I request that seven of my staff to undergo a writing course. I recommend those who have been working with us for not less than five years.
>Jesicca Caballero
>Kenneth Kathleen Hufancia
>Kim Duca
>Sarah Jade Hernandez
>Jet Villamor
>Charliemagne Posugac
>Raiza Joy Sarte
I suggest that Professor Meljohn Tatel to be the one to conduct the writing course. He has been conducting a writing course since year 2000 and has gained excellent recognition in many companies. In fact, he has won nobel prize, upon writing a book for correct writing.
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Date: September 21, 2010 To: John Rovir Labatorio, Training Director From: Arnold Q. Justiniana, Accounting Department Subject: Writing Course Needed Dear John, Our Accounting personnel are in need of a writing course. There has been evidence of writing deficiencies.
- Date: September 21, 2010 To: John Rovir Labatorio, Training Director From: Arnold Q.
- Justiniana, Accounting Department Subject: Writing Course Needed Dear John, Our Accounting personnel are in need of a writing course.
- There has been evidence of writing deficiencies.
- Although they show excellent technical skills, these don't carry over to their writing.
- Generally, they lack training in clear word selection, their sentence structure is hard to follow, and their grammar and punctuation are incorrect.
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Date: September 21, 2010
To: John Rovir Labatorio, Training Director
From: Arnold Q. Justiniana, Accounting Department
Subject: Writing Course Needed
Dear John,
Our Accounting personnel are in need of a writing course. There has been evidence of writing deficiencies. Although they show excellent technical skills, these don't carry over
To: John Rovir Labatorio, Training Director
From: Arnold Q. Justiniana, Accounting Department
Subject: Writing Course Needed
Dear John,
Our Accounting personnel are in need of a writing course. There has been evidence of writing deficiencies. Although they show excellent technical skills, these don't carry over
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Do I really have to put a salutation?It was taught to us that a salutation is not needed. Can you please suggest more details I can put here?I want it to be as detailed as possible.
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I would put a salutation and a closing as well-- that's only polite. Since memos are very informal communications, you can format them any way you wish; however, you have chosen a very formal style which I feel deserves a greeting (I presume you were going to sign it!)
As for further detail, it seems adequate as it is unless you would like to enclose/attach documents written by those st
As for further detail, it seems adequate as it is unless you would like to enclose/attach documents written by those st
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I plan on adding this paragraph. Where should I put it in the memo? Please correct my errors. Thanks
The writing course will last for two weeks. Its schedule will be starting eight in the morning until twelve noon, from Monday, September 27,2010 to Sunday, October 10,2010. The materials that will be needed are a projector,laptop,and microphone. We also need a ve
The writing course will last for two weeks. Its schedule will be starting eight in the morning until twelve noon, from Monday, September 27,2010 to Sunday, October 10,2010. The materials that will be needed are a projector,laptop,and microphone. We also need a ve
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Put it after 'Raiza Joy Sarte'.
The writing course will run for two weeks, from Monday, September 27 to Sunday, October 10, from 8:00 am to 12:00 noon. The materials that will be needed are a projector, laptop, microphone, and sound system, which will aid the professor to present clearly to the participants.
The writing course will run for two weeks, from Monday, September 27 to Sunday, October 10, from 8:00 am to 12:00 noon. The materials that will be needed are a projector, laptop, microphone, and sound system, which will aid the professor to present clearly to the participants.
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