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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Is it clear that the two "him"s refer to Eldako or should I reword the sentence?

After the cha'asii elves and Eldako’s companions hunted down the yaggol and rescued him, they brought him back to the elven village of Ke-Cha-Yet.
  

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No, unclear. Reword it.

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No, unclear. Reword it.
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Okay thanks, how about this revision? After the cha'asii elves and his companions hunted down the yaggol and rescued him, Eldako was brought to the elven village of Ke-Cha-Yet.
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OK.

Are cha'asii and yaggol proper nouns, ie names? If so, start with a capital.
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