introduction of me

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Hello teachers!I wrote this introduction about me, and I'm going to present/read aloud in front of my classmates and a teacher in a few days.Please check any ingrammaticality as well as any unnatural expressions.As always, thank you teachers^^Hello, everyone. It's my great honor to introduce myself to teacher Mr. Lee and my classmates. My name is Lisa Suh and I hope everyone knows my name at least. I'm quite lively and merry as a cricket. That's why I maintain a good relationship with almost all friends I have. Also I take a cheerful view of life so I hardly give up anything easily whatever I do. I believe this is one of my strengths. The job I've always dreamed of is a soldier. I was pretty impressed what soldiers have done for our country. I want to have the opportunity to sacrifice myself to this country. As I live, I made it a rule never to lie in any circumstances. Whenever I feel like to lie on something, I try to come up with the proverb "Honesty is the best policy". On weekends, I play soccer with my close friends or go to library to go over what I've learned the previous week. Now, university entrance exam lefts only 8 months, so I try to refrain from playing soccer. I'll try my best and hardest to be the man who laughs last. Thank you for listening to my introduction. (Are there any other expressions instead of the last one?)

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I have underlined some problem areas and stricken out inappropriate words:

Hello, everyone. It's my great honor to introduce myself to ~~teacher~~ Mr. Lee and my classmates. My name is Lisa Suh and I hope everyone knows my name at least. I'm quite lively and merry as a cricket. That's why I maintain a good relationship with almost all friends I have. Also I take a cheerful view of life, so I hardly give up anything easily whatever I do. I believe this is one of my strengths. The job I've always dreamed of is a soldier. I was pretty impressed what soldiers have done for our country. I want to have the opportunity to sacrifice myself to this country (You want to die??). ~~As I live,~~ I made it a rule never to lie in any circumstances. Whenever I feel like to lie on something, I try to come up with the proverb "Honesty is the best policy". On weekends, I play soccer with my close friends or go to library to go over what I've learned the previous week. Now, university entrance exam lefts only 8 months, so I try to refrain from playing soccer. I'll try my best and hardest to be the man . Thank you for listening ~~to my introduction.~~

Ellisa · Answer

Thanks for your help!! I've revised as your advice. How about this one?

Hello, everyone. It's my great honor to introduce myself to Mr. Lee and my classmates. My name is Lisa Suh and I hope everyone knows my name at least. I'm quite lively and merry as a cricket. That's why I maintain a good relationship with most of my friends. Also I take a cheerful view of life so I don't give up easily whatever I do. I believe this is one of my strengths. The job I've always dreamed of is a soldier. I was pretty impressed by soldiers sacrificing themselves for our country. I want to have the opportunity to dedicate myself to this country. I make it a rule never to lie in any circumstances. Whenever I feel like to lie about something, I try to think the proverb "Honesty is the best policy". On weekends, I play soccer with my close friends or go to the library to go over what I've learned the previous week. Now, university entrance exam lefts only 8 months,(I can't think of another verb instead of left...) so I try to refrain from playing soccer. I'll try my best and hardest to be the man who laughs last.(I want to quote the proverb- the man who laughs last, laughs best) Thank you for listening.

Mister Micawber · Answer

It is not an honor to introduce yourself! It is an honor to introduce another person. A few more changes, and I have also divided it into 3 speaking paragraphs: pause between them:

Hello, everyone. I would like to introduce myself to Mr. Lee and my classmates. My name is Lisa Suh and I hope everyone knows my name at least. I'm quite lively and merry as a cricket. That's why I maintain a good relationship with my friends. Also, I take a cheerful view of life so I don't give up easily, whatever I do. I believe this is one of my strengths.

The job I've always dreamed of is being a soldier. I was pretty impressed by what soldiers have done for our country. I want to have the opportunity to dedicate myself to this country, too. I make it a rule never to lie under any circumstances. Whenever I feel like lying about something, I try to remember the proverb, "Honesty is the best policy".

On weekends, I play soccer with my close friends or go to the library to go over what I've learned the previous week. Now, there are only 8 months left until university entrance exams, so I am trying to refrain from playing soccer. I'll try my best and hardest to succeed. (The proverb does not work there.)

Thank you for listening.

Ellisa · Answer

I DO appreciate for your help!
Stil I'm not sure the following sentence is correct.
"The job I've always dreamed of is being a soldier"
"The job" denotes "being a soldier" here so, should it be like this? ; "The job I've always dreamed of is a soldier"
Thanks million!!!

Quaerereverum · Answer

Hello,

She is lively and merry as a cricket. Does it mean'' she is waliking on the air'' ? Is this expression formal?
Take a cheerful view of life. Does it mean'' to look at bright side'' or be optimistic'?

Thank you in advance.

Mister Micawber · Answer

"The job I've always dreamed of is being a soldier" "The job" denotes "being a soldier" here so, should it be like this? ; "The job I've always dreamed of is a soldier"-- No. I have corrected it to good English. Use what I gave you.

She is lively and merry as a cricket. Does it mean'' she is waliking on the air'' ? Is this expression formal?-- No, of course not—it is a cute metaphoric idiom.
Take a cheerful view of life. Does it mean'' to look at bright side'' or be optimistic'?- Just 'She is cheerful'.

Quaerereverum · Answer

Thank you.

Could you please tell me when do you use this metamorphic? Could you please write a sentence.

Mister Micawber · Answer

Use her sentence as an example.  Or google it and see what comes up.

Quaerereverum · Answer

OK.

Anonymous · Answer

this was really helpful actually and far better than other links . so thanx a ton

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