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Armstrong2004 Posted 12 years ago
Letter Writing

Introduction letter offering our service

Hi am in the process of stating my own company and want help drafting a professional letter to my potential business clients, please see below if it makes sense or the grammar is correct .

Thanks

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Friday, 28 November 2014

Dear sir/Madam

Re: FREE MARKETING SERVICES FOR YOUR COMPANY PRODUCTS

Hope you are okay, Let me introduce myself, my name is Armstrong Mahagwa the founder of Xxxxxxxx, we are a very young company based in the UK with big ambitions just about to launch this website, it’s a classified website and i noticed that the big classified companies like Xxxxxxx charge too much money for small companies or business to advertise on their site.

So i decided to start a company to give small business a chance to showcase their product without having to think about the high cost of marketing.

So feel free to advertise and post as much as you want with us at no cost for 3 months and after 3 months if you feel you want to continue working with us we charge ¼ of what xxxxxxx charges.

Part of our commitment is
· To also get young people involved in the business where they can learn different skills all related to running and marketing of a business
· Help advertise small or independent business like yourselves on our homepage so that it can help drive traffic to your web site or shop at no extra cost, we will do this by randomly selecting our business customers to promote
· We intent to reach 1m plus customers every 6 months by working with local universities, colleges and training institutions and all local councils

As we grow we don’t want to be the biggest classified company but rather the best in customer service.

I hope you find the information above helpful and hope to have you as a customer of ours and we can do business with you in the long term

If you have any questions or queries about this offer don’t hesitate to contact me on xxxxxxxxxx

Please feel free to give us any feedback with regards to our site

Regards
  

Top answer

Here are some suggestions. Since it needs quite a bit of tuning, I did not get to the finer points. I hope you will benefit.

  • Here are some suggestions.
  • Since it needs quite a bit of tuning, I did not get to the finer points.
  • I hope you will benefit.
  • Armstrong2004 Hope you are okay, Not a good introduction.
  • Guaranteed to encourage the reader to stop and bin it.
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Here are some suggestions. Since it needs quite a bit of tuning, I did not get to the finer points.
I hope you will benefit.
Armstrong2004Hope you are okay,
Not a good introduction. Guaranteed to encourage the reader to stop and bin it.
Don't end a sentence with a comma.

Put your "gotcha" line first off to capture attention.

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