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Creativeguru Posted 16 years ago
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Insurance ad...please give me feedback

Insurance ad

Positioning:
Anything can happen anywhere

Ad 1:
Three people walking together on a road chit-chatting, a very cool and calm atmosphere
Suddenly out of no where a bullet train comes from behind passes at a lighting speed in between of the three, all of three tries to escape but it crushes the middlemen, now other two are very shock about the incident,
At last voice over comes anything can happen anywhere
With all the details of insurance product

I want you to see the grammar as well give me the honest feedback about the concept
Thanks & Regards
  

Top answer

I have underlined some problem areas: Positioning: Anything can happen anywhere Ad 1: Three peo ple w alking together on a road chit-chatti ng, a very cool and calm atmospher e Suddenly out of no where a bullet train comes from behi nd pas ses at a lighting speed in between of the thr ee, al l of three tries to escap e bu t it crushes the middlemen, n o w oth er two are very shock about the incide nt, At la st voice over com es any thing can happen anywh ere With all the details of insu rance product The concept is of senseless violence and is unacceptable to most media.

  • I have underlined some problem areas: Positioning: Anything can happen anywhere Ad 1: Three peo ple w alking together on a road chit-chatti ng, a very cool and calm atmospher e Suddenly out of no where a bullet train comes from behi nd pas ses at a lighting speed in between of the thr ee, al l of three tries to escap e bu t it crushes the middlemen, n o w oth er two are very shock about the incide nt, At la st voice over com es any thing can happen anywh ere With all the details of insu rance product The concept is of senseless violence and is unacceptable to most media.
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I have underlined some problem areas:

Positioning:
Anything can happen anywhere

Ad 1:

Three people walking together on a road chit-chatting, a very cool and calm atmosphere
Suddenly out of no where a bullet train comes from behind passes at a lighting speed in between of the three, all of three
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Three people are walking together on a road chit-chatting, it's a very cool and calm atmosphere
Suddenly out of nowhere a bullet train comes from behind at the lighting speed. All of them try to escape, but it crushes the middleman, & now other two are in a state of shock
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Three people are walking together on a road chit-chatting. It's a very cool and calm atmosphere
Suddenly out of nowhere a bullet train comes from behind at lightning speed. All of them try to escape, but it crushes the man in the middle, and now the other two are in a state of shock because of the incident.

Then comes a voice-over: "Anythi

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