In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies.

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Write about the following topic: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

The balance between studying and relaxing is extremely important. People usually said that if we could control them, we would success in our life. In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies. As you know, every cloud has a silver lining, everything has two sides of it, so the following topic has lots of advantages and disadvantages to discuss for young people before making a decision.

First, this thesis has many advantages. After finishing high school, under pressure and stress, young people need time to release all of them. They have thousands of way to solve this problem. Young people are always curious about the World that has lots of mysterious things, so they can go for a trip with friends, family, or by themselves to explore the World and create memorable time. They have not only this way to relax themselves but also others way to do that. They can send they time on working. Not having a professional work but young people can choose some simple work, such as being a waiter, shop assistant, or barista. If they worked, they would know the true value of money that they had made, widen their knowledge about the daily lives of adults, or make them be more confident.

Second, I want to mention the disadvantages that the following topic could lead to. Spending a year just to do things that make them feel relax, is that one way of wasting time? In my opinion, I think it is necessary to shorten the length of that time. Young people can travel, work, or do somethings that they want in summer vacation. If they had much time to relax, they could be boring, lazier , or lose effort in studying.

Everything has two sides of it. That’s why we need to consider the statement in this following topic, administer young people a best advice that they could make a right decision.