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Minh Vũ 9549 Posted 4 years ago
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In many coutries, children are becoming overweight and un healthy. Some people think that the goverment should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is firmly believe that goverment should take resposibility for children's obesity and health. However, I partly agree with this opinion, schools and parents also pay a vital role in this problem.

To begin with, parents now tend to mollycodle children so that children create a bad habit of daily diet. The reason for this is many working adults have little or no time for family. Young generations today prefer unhealthy food which is lack neccessary nutricents such as fast food because they are convenience. Also, most education institutions focus on other academic subjects, that lead to lack of physical excercise. Those reasons may affect children lifelong physical health and lead to deadly disease.

On top of that, goverment need to have several solutions for this problem. Nowadays, the social media burgeon and widespread so that unhealthy food appear almost everywhere. The authorities have to restrict the advertisements of foods and drinks that contain high level of suga and fat on TV and other social media channels. Besides, it is important for goverment to raise public awareness of childhood obesity aming citizens and have an annual check-up in order to follow children heath easily.

To sum up,although the goverment have to establish several efficient solution for children health risk , parents and schools have a huge impact of children's health and obesity. For these reasons, children need to have a balanced diet and cultivate a good habit to stay in shape.

  

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It is firmly believe (wrong form) that goverment (wrong spelling) should take resposibility (wrong spelling) for children's obesity and health. However, (wrong use of transition) I partly agree with this opinion,

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I think children being overweight or fat is because of our modern parent's laxity on them, they tend to be more independent and lack respect. The reason why they can't control how they feed.

some children put on weight due to stress and anxiety and that can lead to an increase in suicides in our communities.

A parent should never forget they have power and dominion over their child

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