In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the goverment should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Have a good health is one of important issues that human take interest in nowadays. In many countries, the amount of kids who get over-weight and have an unhealthy lives is increasing day by day. It's said that government has the responsibility to solve this problem. In my opinion, I do not agree totally because this matter should be solved by both sides, government and parents.

The government's responsibility in decreasing the number of obese children is not completely deniable. Organizing health seminars for both parents and their children is a possible way to raise health awareness and give them some suggestions to have a good life. Besides, the authority should held more physical activity competitions with a high prize to attract more people taking part in.

The duty to combat obesity in children should not fall on the government alone, because of parents, the main factor, affect to their children's lifestyle. Youngsters can easily watch and learn the way that adults live. To orient their children have a healthy life, parents should live well first. Another reason is that there are too much attraction from technical vehicles, such as computers, mobile phones, TVs, leading them to have a sedentary lifestyle. Parents should encourage them to do more exercises to strengthen their health. Last but not least, lacking of physical activities combining with unbalanced diets with lots of fat foods is really a big threaten not only to children but also to adults and gain more chances to get cardiovascular disease. So meals should be prepared with enough nutrients for children to grow up and have a healthy lifestyle.

Authority should do what the can to curb the obesity epidemic and co-operate with parents to give their children to have a healthy life and combat the obesity. The adults should also live well to protect and strengthen their health.