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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
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It is impossible to understand the Daishonin's Buddhism by just reading the Goshos (= the Daishonin's writings) once or twice. We can deepen our understanding of the Daishonin's Buddhism gradually when we study it repeatedly and by having faith in the Gohonzon (= object of worship) and based our practice for oneself and others as our foundation and the guidance of our High Priest as our guiding principle. We must have a pure heart in order not to hold arrogance.
Thanks a lot.
It is impossible to understand the Daishonin's Buddhism by just reading the Goshos (= the Daishonin's writings) once or twice. We can deepen our understanding of the Daishonin's Buddhism gradually when we study it repeatedly and by having faith in the Gohonzon (= object of worship) and based our practice for oneself and others as our foundation and the guidance of our High Priest as our guiding principle. We must have a pure heart in order not to hold arrogance.
Thanks a lot.
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Hi, Here are some suggestions. The second sentence seems too long and complicarted to me. The part I have left in bold is hard for me to understand so I suggest that you reword it, perhaps as a separate sentence.
- Hi, Here are some suggestions.
- The second sentence seems too long and complicarted to me.
- The part I have left in bold is hard for me to understand so I suggest that you reword it, perhaps as a separate sentence.
- It is impossible to understand the Daishonin's Buddhism just by reading the Goshos (the Daishonin's writings) once or twice.
- We can deepen our understanding of the Daishonin's Buddhism gradually when we study it repeatedly, by having faith in the Gohonzon (object of worship) and by basing our practice for ourselves and others as our foundation and the guidance of our High Priest as our guiding principle.
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Hi,
Here are some suggestions. The second sentence seems too long and complicarted to me. The part I have left in bold is hard for me to understand so I suggest that you reword it, perhaps as a separate sentence.
It is impossible to understand the Daishonin's Buddhism just by reading the Goshos (the Daishonin's writings) once or twice. We can deepen our understanding of the Dais
Here are some suggestions. The second sentence seems too long and complicarted to me. The part I have left in bold is hard for me to understand so I suggest that you reword it, perhaps as a separate sentence.
It is impossible to understand the Daishonin's Buddhism just by reading the Goshos (the Daishonin's writings) once or twice. We can deepen our understanding of the Dais
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