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Hi dear teachers,

Could you please take a look at the following sentences for any grammatical mistakes? Any corrections to make the following sentences sound more natural are heartily welcome.

1). I saw the job advertisement posted (is 'uploaded' better here?) on the internet four days ago by your company. The advertisement said that the company is hiring "freshers" for the post of (or for the job of? or for the vacancies of?) office assistants.

2). I have come in reference to the job advertisement for the hiring of office assistants posted on the internet by your company four days ago.

Thank you.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

1). I saw your job advertisement posted on the internet (It's better to put the web site address. "The Internet" is extremely vague, given its reach.) four days ago. The advertisement said that ~~the company is~~ you are hiring "freshers" for vacancies in the positions of office assistant.

2). I have come in to apply for the one of the office assistant positions described in your job advertisement posted four days ago on WWW.fantasticjobopenings.com

Laborious · Answer

Dear Alphecca, lots of thanks to you!

would you kindly tell me when we use the phrases "in reference to" and "in reference with"?

Also, If you have time, could you look at these sentences as well, please?

- Do you have/possess any experience (of working somewhere)? / Have you ever worked anywhere before?

[Are the above sentences identical in meaning? With "do you have/possess any experience", is it better to say "of working somewhere"?]

How about this one;
-I got this info(rmation) from a website called WWW.xyz.com that you are hiring freshers for the vacant positions of office assistants in your company.

- If you give me a chance, I make you sure (or assure you?) that I will be proved an asset rather than a liability to your company / you.

- Five years from now, I'd like to see myself growing towards a reputable (or respectable?) position where you're today, by working hard and by becoming proficient in my work.

Thank you once again, A-stars!

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Would you kindly tell me when we use the phrases "in reference to" and "in reference with"?

These are very formal phrases, usually used in writing. You can use them in formal business settings.

Laborious- Do you have/possess any experience (of working somewhere)? / Have you ever worked anywhere before? [Are the above sentences identical in meaning? With "do you have/possess any experience", is it better to say "of working somewhere"?]

Are the above sentences identical in meaning? Pretty much so. The first one with "experience" might imply something that is specifically related to the job you are applying for.
For example, you are applying to be a technical writer:

Interviewer: Have you ever worked anywhere before?
Applicant: Yes, I served food and took customers' orders at the local MacDonalds during the summer. That helped me financially to finish school.

Interviewer: Do you have any prior experience?
Applicant: No, not really. I have worked before, but not as a technical writer.

Laborious-I got this info(rmation) from a website called WWW.xyz.com that you are hiring freshers for the vacant positions of office assistants in your company.

OK, in British English. American English does not use freshers.

Laborious- If you give me a chance, I make you sure (or assure you?) that I will be proved an asset rather than a liability to your company / you.

It's an OK sentence, but not good for an interviewing situation. Do not mention any negatives in an interview, unless asked specifically.

I can assure you that I will be an asset for my team. (/ the company.) I am enthusiastic, learn fast, and will go out of my way to help my co-workers.

Laborious- Five years from now, I'd like to see myself growing towards a reputable (or respectable?) position where you're today, by working hard and by becoming proficient in my work.

I would not mention the interviewer's position.

There are some good videos on Youtube for interviewing. This is only one.

Laborious · Answer

AlpheccaStarsOK, in British English. African English does not use freshers.

it's not very essential, but it would certainly add something to my knowledge (of the language) if you told me about the other terms/words that we could use instead of "freshers".

AlpheccaStarsLaborious- If you give me a chance, I make you sure (or assure you?) that I will be proved an asset rather than a liability to your company / you.It's an OK sentence, but not good for an interviewing situation. Do not mention any negatives in an interview, unless asked specifically.

Does saying this express a negativity of mine? I mean, by saying "I will be proved an asset rather than a liability...", am I not being positive?

Is it that the problem is with the "if you give me a chance, I make you sure..."?

Would I still be mentioning any negatives if I said something like, "If you ~~give me a chance~~ hire/employ me, I will be (proved) an asset rather than a liability to my team / the company"?

Thank you very much. I really liked the way you explained the difference between 'having any prior experience' and 'having worked before'?

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Laboriousit's not very essential, but it would certainly add something to my knowledge (of the language) if you told me about the other terms/words that we could use instead of "freshers".

Sorry for the typo. I meant American English, of course.
In my company, we differentiated "new hires" from "experienced hires." "New hires" were inexperienced people directly graduated from schools.

LaboriousDoes saying this express a negativity of mine? I mean, by saying "I will be proved an asset rather than a liability...", am I not being positive?

The word "liability" suggests the possibility of your being a liability. It's best not to put that idea in the recruiter's head.

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