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Nhatminh12369 Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
I'm leaning writting, Can someone check my paragraph for me :)
I have wiritten a paragraph, and I think it may have some mistake. Can someone check it for me please. Thank so much 
"The best effort during my student life is to find some good friends. I really like to make friend with intelligent people or some people who have a big dream. When you work with these people, you will learn a lot of things. You can learn about their thinking, about their lifestyle. Especially, some people older than me can talk with you about their experience. It will help you abridgment time to get the experience.
Morever, a good friend is a person whom I can share something unhappy, he can help you when you got a trouble and otherwise, you will help him when he get a trouble. I have some friends like this. It's very great! I like my life so much."
"The best effort during my student life is to find some good friends. I really like to make friend with intelligent people or some people who have a big dream. When you work with these people, you will learn a lot of things. You can learn about their thinking, about their lifestyle. Especially, some people older than me can talk with you about their experience. It will help you abridgment time to get the experience.
Morever, a good friend is a person whom I can share something unhappy, he can help you when you got a trouble and otherwise, you will help him when he get a trouble. I have some friends like this. It's very great! I like my life so much."
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Your grammar is pretty good overall, but I have underlined some parts that are wrong phrases and deleted unnecessary words. Please try to fix the problems and post your revised paragraph. The best effort during my student life is to find some good friends.
- Your grammar is pretty good overall, but I have underlined some parts that are wrong phrases and deleted unnecessary words.
- Please try to fix the problems and post your revised paragraph.
- The best effort during my student life is to find some good friends.
- I really like to make friend with intelligent people or some people who have a big dream .
- When you work with these people, you will learn a lot of things.
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Your grammar is pretty good overall, but I have underlined some parts that are wrong phrases and deleted unnecessary words. Please try to fix the problems and post your revised paragraph.
The best effort during my student life is to find some good friends. I really like to make friend with intelligent people orsome people who have a big dream
The best effort during my student life is to find some good friends. I really like to make friend with intelligent people or
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