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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
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I'll very glad, if you could help me to read my writing.

0This is my first post, if i have something wrong, i have to say sorry.02br
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00Now i'm going to create my company website in english language, but the problem is my grammar is very stupid (and i don't know to that foreign will understand like the things whether i want to say or not)02br
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00So, i'll be very happy if you could help me to read this.02br
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00It's about my company which are going to build a new office.02br
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01font00Following to the last meeting of our board of directors, the company decide to invest about 1 million baht in order to develop the new office in the manufactoring building.02font02br
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01font00Due to the old office which we face a lot of problem, for instance, the lag of area to keep the documents, desk and computer are not support our staff, therefore, we think that this is the best way and worth to open the new office which come with "5C" consideration (Convenient, Clean, Comfortable, Charming and C-cure)02font02br
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01font00The new office will consist of many things which will support much more 4 times from work efficient in old office. "It's worth to invest a lot of money in order to get the nice office which will encourage our staff in both of efficiency and performance" Viroj Tangsurakit, Director of T.S.K. Holding Co., Ltd. said.02font02br
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01font00The wooden rubber floor will be used to flooring this new office, 5 new desks will be set up, Internet Wire-Less lan and 4 new computers also install in this office. And many things that can inspire our office to the social of innovative. We believe that the good environment will influence all of the staff to do high performance.02font02br
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01font00This investment should be successful in next year 2007.02font02br
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00So, i want to know whether my writing is ok or not ? If there is a full mark of 10 how will you give me ? What is my problem ? Is there any sentence that you don't understand what i mean ?02br
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00Thank you very very very much.02br
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00This is my real homepage 01a05000/ 02a02br
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00P.S. I come from Thailand, and if you want to talk with me, you can add my msn 01a00Email Removed00">01span00Email Removed02span02a00.02br
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00Thank you again.0230hrefhttp://www.tskthai.com
  

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02font 02br 00Fine apart from misspelling of "manufacturing"02br 02br 01font 00Due to the old office which we face a lot of problem, for instance, 01font 00the lag of area 02font 00to keep the documents, desk and computer are not support our staff, therefore, we think that this is the best way and worth to open the new office which come with "5C" consideration (Convenient, Clean, Comfortable, Charming and C-cure)02font 02br 01font 00What is "lag" - ? - Most of this sentence does not make sense. It needs rephrasing - the old office was unsuitable and provided many problems for the staff.

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  • 02font 02br 00Fine apart from misspelling of "manufacturing"02br 02br 01font 00Due to the old office which we face a lot of problem, for instance, 01font 00the lag of area 02font 00to keep the documents, desk and computer are not support our staff, therefore, we think that this is the best way and worth to open the new office which come with "5C" consideration (Convenient, Clean, Comfortable, Charming and C-cure)02font 02br 01font 00What is "lag" - ?
  • - Most of this sentence does not make sense.
  • It needs rephrasing - the old office was unsuitable and provided many problems for the staff.
  • 02br 02font 02br 02br 01font 00The new office will consist of many things which will support much 01font 00more 4 times02font 00 from work efficient in old office.
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1font00Following to the last meeting of our board of directors, the company decide to invest about 1 million baht in order to develop the new office in the manufactoring building.02font02br
00Fine apart from misspelling of "manufacturing"02br
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01font00Due to the old office which we face a lot of
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0Before all, i have to thank Feebs11 very much about your correction.02br
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00Seem to be my english writing is not so good at all.02br
00I will try to improve and practice more as well.02br
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00Thank you again.02br
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00This is my editing02br
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01font00 The old office
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