ILETS WRITING TASK 1

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Please give feedback and help me point out the mistakes and give me a band score too! Thank you so much!The table shows total family income per household in a UK city in 2010 and 2013, together with specific expenditure on food and clothes. The two pie charts illustrate how spending on food and clothes was divided into five categories.Overall, it is clear that total income in 2013 decreased, whereas spending on food and clothes rose from the 2010 figure. The proportion spent on fruits and vegetables increased dramatically in 2013.A significant fell of $4000 was witnessed in total household income from 2010 to 2013. The period observed a slight climb in the expenditure on food and clothes, from $14000 in 2010 to $15000 in 2013.Turning to the pie chart, the percentage spent on fruits and vegetables grown sharply, to reach 35% in 2013. In terms of dairy products, this figure increased from 15% to 20%. In contrast, the proportion spent on other food and drinks remained the same at 18%, the figure for the remaining categories declined remarkably by 10%.

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The table shows average total family income and expenditure on food and clothes ~~per household~~ (repetitive. Family has the same meaning as household) in a UK city in 2010 and 2013~~, together with specific expenditure on food and clothes.~~ The two pie charts ~~illustrate~~ (wrong word) break down the ~~how~~ spending ~~on food and~~ into clothes and four food categories: dairy; fruits and vegetables; meat and fish; and other food and drinks. ~~was divided into five categories.~~

Overall, ~~it is clear that~~ (useless filler) total income in 2013 had decreased, whereas spending on food and clothes rose from the 2010 amount. ~~figure~~. (wrong word) The proportion spent on fruits and vegetables had substantially increased ~~dramatically in 2013~~.

A significant fell (wrong word - fell is the past tense of the verb fall. ) of $4000 was witnessed (wrong word - only people witness things. Numbers do not witness, observe, see or experience. DO not use these anthropomorphic verbs in a science/math context. ) in total household income from 2010 to 2013. The period observed a slight climb in the expenditure on food and clothes, from $14000 in 2010 to $15000 in 2013.

~~Turning to the pie chart,~~ The percentage spent on fruits and vegetables grown (wrong form) sharply, to reach 35% in 2013. In terms of dairy products, this ~~figure~~ (wrong word) increased from 15% to 20%. In contrast, the proportion spent on other food and drinks remained the same at 18%, and ~~the figure~~ (wrong word) ~~for~~ the remaining categories declined ~~remarkably~~ by 10%.

Sample essay. Note that only mathematical expressions and words are used. This essay shows the use of simple math to compute values in pounds sterling for the different categories.

The infographic, consisting of a table and two pie charts, shows the average family income and their expenditures on food and clothing in two years, 2010 and 2013. Specifically, the table lists the earnings and spending in pounds sterling while the pie charts break down this spending into five categories. One category is clothing, and the other four are food items: fruits and vegetables; meat and fish; dairy; and other food and drinks. The data is from one city in the UK.

Overall, the average income of these families had decreased by more than 15% over these three years. However, they increased their spending on food as they curtailed the amount spent on clothing.

The pie charts show in detail how they divided up their food and clothing budget. In 2010, the amount devoted to was £3080, a little over 10% of their £29,000 income. Three years later, it dropped considerably to £1800, representing a little over 7% of their 2013 earnings of £25,000. In 2010, food represented 78% of the total, and the largest amount, 25%, was for meat and fish, followed by fruits and vegetables at 20%. In 2013, they had cut their meat and fish budget from £3500 to £2250 or 15% of the total, and instead purchased more fruits and vegetables, which rose from £2800 to £5250, or more than a third of the total. They also increased the amount spent on dairy products from £2100 to £3000, nearly one-third more.

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