IELTS writting task 2 thanks a lots

Topic: peple have easy access to video games nowadays and many people consider playing videogames as a form of entertainment or even educational. Others however completely deny this and say that video games only hace negative effect on people. which point of view do you agree with ? why?

In these days, people have more and more sort of way to entertain. Playing video game is one of the most popular way which not only helps to satisfy our relaxing need, but also has the educational function. However, some others suppose that it is the bad habit and cause only harm to us.

On the one hand, we can not deny the great benefit of playing video games. Firstly, it is able to make people relax and escape from a mess of work, study and deathline. Besides, it is similar to a remedy which refresh our brain to get ready for the new challenge. Secondly, playing video games also has the use of education. For example, most of the video games support us to pratice IT, language skills and inprove our typing speed. In addition, players have a chance to learn teamwork, time-management, quickly solving problems and leadership skills.

On the other hand, we also have to cope with a lot of problem that come with it. It is clear that some young people are more aggressive and have the bad behavior because they are affected by the violent games. Besides, people can be addicted by playing video games, resulted in distracting from work and studying. Moreover, they are easy to get risk of illness and eye diseases because instead of doing physical activities, they spend too much time on sitting for hours and sticking eyes to the computer's screen.

In conclusion, video games come along with both of advantages and disadvantages. It is impossible to confuse its entertainment and education functions. However, we need to know how to balance our time between playing and working, select the right games without violent factors in order to get the desired effect of playing video games.

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