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The diagram describes the stages in the process of recycling used paper.

There are six stages in the process, beginning with collecting waste paper and ending with sorted papers renewed by paper making machine.

At the first stage, unusable papers from public paper banks and businesses are collected before being sorted by hand to eliminate graded and unsuitable paper. Then they are delivered to a paper mill for two more quality control stages.

Up to the fourth stage, waste papers are washed into a pulp, prior to removing other materials included like staples, dust. At the final quality control stage, inks and glues are removed from pulps before getting reformed in a machine factory as the final stage of the process.

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The diagram describes the stages in the process of recycling used paper.

There are six stages in the process, beginning with collecting waste paper and ending with sorted papers renewed by paper making machine.

At the first stage, unusable papers from public paper banks and businesses (Directly copied, not paraphrased) are collected before being sorted by hand to eliminate graded and unsuitable paper. Then they are delivered to a paper mill for two more quality control stages.

Up to the fourth stage, waste papers are washed into a pulp, prior to removing other materials ~~included~~ like staples, dust. At the final quality control stage, inks and glues are removed from pulps before getting reformed in a machine factory as the final stage of the process.

Suggested essay (170 words)

The process flow chart demonstrates the six basic steps of converting old, used paper into new paper that can be used for newspapers, printing, packaging, and other purposes.

The first step is to amass discarded paper from public collection bins and businesses that have paper recycling policies. The next two steps occur in a local recycling center, where the incoming waste paper is hand-sorted into grades. Paper which cannot be further processed is removed from the stream. The rest of the material is transported to a paper mill.

Steps four through six are executed in a paper mill which has equipment for treating the incoming raw material. The first stage is cleaning and filtering out foreign objects such as staples and paper clips. The output of this stage is s mashed paper mixture called pulp. At this point the mass contains residues of inks, dyes, glue and other coatings. The specialized de-inking chemicals remove these undesirable impurities and produce clean paper pulp. The final step is the paper-making machine which converts the clean pulp into usable sheets of paper.

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