IELTS writing test - Task 2 - Please help me on my essay

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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Global warming is certainly the problem of the new millennium. Major cause for this is the overuse of fossil fuels. The natural sources below the Earth surface are used in various ways. However, the main demand is for production of plastics and for vehicles fuels. One of the suggested solution is the rise in cost of the raw materials. Although this could lower the consumption, I believe that this would not adequately address the current problem.

The usage of fuels created water and air pollution. Oil is commonly used in cars, which significantly increased the contamination of air. Ships are major problem for water pollution, as they realise an enormous amount of oil in to the ocean. Above that most of the plastics ends in the sea, endangering animals' lives. Rising the cost of fuels might lower the usage, but not prevent the global warming. Higher prices would not stop industries from trading and producing plastic materials. It would rather create greater monopoly and increase the gap between the rich and the poor.

To solve the environmental issue, in my opinion, more attention should be drawn towards renewable resources. Lowering the costs in the latter would increase the usage of it across the whole society regardless of the class. Taking electric cars as an example, that do not realise any toxic gases, making them affordable would help reducing the air pollution. In addition, the government of each country should create standards for natural renewable resources, defining how much renewable energy should be created per year.

In conclusion, the global warming is a huge issue, that must be confronted. Since major cause for it is the high demand for fossil fuels, many believe that with the increase in costs would reduce the problem. I believe this is not the case and to truly solve the problem the renewable energy should become more affordable.