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The two pictures compare the layout of the city hospital as it was in the year 2007 with a proposed site for the year 2010.

It is clear that the principal change for 2010 involved the addition of roundabouts and the rearrangement of pedestrianization from east to west. The city hospital would then be able to be legible and convenient for victims because they can move to another department with ease.

In 2010, the city hospital conducted two roundabouts situating in the junctions which connected with the hospital road. In addition, these roundabouts were linked with the bus station which replaced the bus stop along with the site of hospital road 3 years earlier. In the east of this road, the car park was shared by staff and the public in 2007 was separated precisely: staff car park located in the old position and public car park was built in the east of ring road.

The features that have remained are the width of three roads and the city hospital’s location.