IELTS - WRITING TASK II

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All children should learn to play a musical instrument at school. hoa far do you agree with this statement?My EssayMusic is believed to be the food for the soul. I extremely agree that learning to play a musical instrument at school from an early age is useful for all chidren in many ways.Firstly, playing an instrument helps children get comfortable with self expression. In order to be good at their instrument they need to practice and perform in front of a few audiences, for instance, their music teacher, parents, brother, sister, or firends. Therefore, they can increase their confidence while they are growing up.Secondly, it makes them learn patience. Learning how to play an instrument is not easy task. It requires a lot of patience which is not a natural skill to most of us. Children have to presever through many hours, days, and possible years of practicing.For these ways mentioned above, I strongly believe that learning to play a musical instrument for all children is really helpful.

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Your essay with 152 words does not exceed the minimum word count, 250 words. You will lose a lot of points in "task completion."

Music is believed to be the food for the soul. I extremely (1. wrong word choice) agree that learning to play a musical instrument at school from an early age is useful for all chidren in many ways.

~~Firstly~~, First, playing an instrument helps children get comfortable with self-expression. In order to be good at their instrument they need to practice and perform in front of a few audiences, for instance, their music teacher, parents, brother, sister, or firends. Therefore, (wrong word choice) they can increase their confidence while they are growing up.

~~Secondly~~, Second, it makes them learn patience. Learning how to play an instrument is not an easy task. It requires a lot of patience which is not a natural for ~~skill~~ to most of us. Children have to presever through many hours, days, and possible years of practicing.

For these ways mentioned above, I strongly believe that learning to play a musical instrument ~~for all children~~ is really helpful for all children.

1. You need to learn vocabulary words to answer the question "to what extent" or "to what degree". These words are adverbs of extent. Here is a list. You can use them with either "agree" or "disagree." You do not need to know all of them. They are grouped as synonyms:

totally
completely
wholeheartedly
without reservations
unequivocally
unconditionally

somewhat
partly
partially
with (some, a few) reservations
a little bit

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