IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TRANGTRAN

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TOPIC: CULTURE

A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationality.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more and more people migrate to other countries for a lot of purposes, for example working, studying or getting married and so on. This leads to the combination of many nationalities in the population of some countries. It is often said that the nation whose population from plenty of other countries becomes more interesting and develops more quickly. From my respective, I partly agree with the above opinion. However, the combination of nationality in a country also has some drawbacks.

The mixture of nationality brings attraction and faster development to the local. Because of cultural diversity, people have a chance to learn new things that they have ever never experienced. In addition, a combination of many ideas or thought of different people is good for solving problems because the problem is considered based on different aspects. As a result, development of the country is faster.

Besides the benefits mentioned above, there also has some disadvantages. For instance, misunderstanding between citizens may occur due to differences in languages and daily habit as well. On the other hand, different opinions can make it difficult for deciding the final solution. This prevents the development of the country.

In conclusion, I partly agree with the opinion that the mixture of nationality in a country can be advantages in attraction and development of the local because of the diversity of cultures and ideas. However, misunderstanding may occur due to the different languages and thoughts.