IELTS Writing Task 2 to correct

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people had such a situations when they either had to accept the situation they have now or try move straight with their idea to improve their live. In my opinion it is definitely correct to improve your life, but also there are some situations when you have no ability to do what you want.

On one hand, the vast majority of people just can’t completely change their position in life. The best example for such a situation would be some countries which are living in poor conditions. In case of not developing their infrastructure and other aspects of the life of that countries. For example such kind of countries like African countries. For these people I can advise to try to improve their situation. If not just try to survive in that harsh conditions.

On the other hand, a few would try to improve the situation they have. These are people who really work hard to archive the goal. A good example for these would be the countries who lost the Second World War. Such as Germany, Japan or Korea. They had their economic totally destroyed but thanking to their willpower, they archived the goal. Overall, they are the now the best countries in economic in the world.
To conclude, there are a few situations when you could improve your situation, but the others just even trying to improve something.