IELTS writing task 2 - Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Modern life, children are easily impacted when they interact with information surrounding different resources such as video games, TV shows, music, and books. There are some people say that reading books is better for children than watching movies or playing games on computers. Personally, I disagree with this argument and I believe in the belief of digital products.

First of all, reading books is a really helpful routine for adults when they require to relax or even work and research but not suitable for children. The first reason, the children seem to not excited with books or letters inside them. Although it includes plenty of good content, spending time for reading requires patience a lot and children do not have patient enough to do. The evidence to prove, there are just a few students reading books voluntarily in the previous night to prepare for the new lessons in the morning after, they usually play games or watching TV series before bedtime instead. Somehow, cartoons and games catch their attention naturally. In this way, videos are applied for education in many countries, lessons are more interesting, livelier and intelligible if they are illustrated by images and sounds actually.

On the other hand, despite positive beliefs, playing games and watching TV too much are two of the main reasons for eye diseases such as myopia and astigmatism. In this case, reading books chosen as the alternative method, children still comprehend all the same crucial information with videos on computers. In spite of more difficult, it is necessary for protecting children from eye-diseases. Nevertheless, books are designed better, people use a lot of images and colors to make books becoming more attractive. For example, all fairy tale books that decorated mysteriously and colorfully rouse the curiousness of children. In my perspective, I think it is an intelligent method of manufacturers, this way helps a lot of parents easily restrict excessive interaction of children with computers or televisions.

In conclusion, videos and computer games are really useful not only for entertaining, connecting, or business but also for researching and education. They replace gradually traditionally educated methods like reading books but incompletely.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

In modern life, children are easily impacted when they interact with information from their surroundings and that comes from different resources such as video games, TV shows, music, and books. There are some people who say that reading books is better for children than watching movies or playing games on computers. Personally, I disagree with this argument and I believe in the belief of digital products. [ That’s poorly phrased. Be precise as to what you mean. You need to state a clear position at the end of the introduction.]

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You have some good ideas, but they are very disorganized. A key to getting a good mark for an essay is to structure (organize) your ideas into cohesive body paragraphs. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence that defines the scope of that paragraph. After that, you elaborate on the idea in subsequent sentences in a general-to-specific manner. That means you need to give specific examples towards the end of a body paragraph.

Regroup your thoughts and, just for now, post only the topic sentences for your two body paragraphs below.

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Take a look at my responses in the following link to learn more about essay structure.

Ductu135 · Answer

This is my topic sentences for each body paragraph:

- Body paragraph 1: First of all, computers and televisions change the way adults communicating with children

- Body paragraph 2: However, despite positive beliefs, games and TV series still cannot replace books

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Thank you!

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Please do not put the essay prompt or instructions in the "Subject" line.

Post it like this:

Subject: IELTS Writing Task 2

Message body:

Topic: Some People Think Reading Stories In Books Is Better Than Watching TV Or Playing Computer Games For Children. To What Extent Do You Agree Or Disagree?

My essay:

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Ductu135 · Answer

This is my updated essay after reading all comments

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In modern life, children are easily impacted when they interact with information from their surroundings and that comes from different resources such as video games, TV shows, music, and books. There are some people who say that reading books is better for children than watching movies or playing games on computers. Personally, I completely disagree with this argument and I believe that technological devices become the efficient tools to communicate and educate children

First of all, computers and televisions change the way adults communicating with children. Thus, reading books is a really helpful routine for adults when they require to relax or even work and research but not suitable for children. The first reason, the children seem to not excited with books or letters inside them. Although it includes plenty of good content, spending time for reading requires patience a lot and children do not have patient enough to do. The evidence to prove, there are just a few students reading books voluntarily in the previous night to prepare for the new lessons in the morning after, they usually play games or watching TV series before bedtime instead. Somehow, cartoons and games catch their attention naturally. In this way, videos are applied to education in many countries, lessons are more and more interesting, livelier and intelligible when they are illustrated by images and sound actually.

Besides, video games and TV shows not only make children relax but give them good orientations. Playing games is considered as an intellectual sport, people who play games in appropriate period enhance their ways of logical thinking. So that parents let children impact some mathematical games earlier, therefore, help children practice some mathematical skills and it is useful when children start to learn math at school. On the other hand, parents should spend time watching TV with children and explain messages and implications from TV series. It is extremely efficacious ways to orientate children’s personality

In conclusion, computers and televisions bring children more benefits than harmfulness and parents should feel comfortable as long as children play games or watch TV rationally

Ductu135 · Answer

I updated this paragraph below:

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Besides, video games and TV shows not only make children relax but also stimulate their intellect and enhances their logical thinking. Moreover, parents should let children get used to playing some simply mathematical games early, which is so beneficial when children go to school. The evidence to prove, in Vietnam, parents and children usually play 2048, a game requires logical thinking in simple level, to practice operations such as addition and multiplication. There are a lot of Vietnamese parents use this game as an educational tool because of its effectiveness. This is the acknowledgment for all benefits that games or TV shows bring people in education.

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