IELTS Writing Task 2 - second edition

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Now I write this essay again follow this:

People have different views about the investment in transport infrastructure to address the traffic congestion problem. Many people agree with the idea of developing train and subway lines, whereas others believe that the authorities need to build more and wider roads.

On the one hand, governments need to upgrade and expand public transport provision. The main reason for this view is that trains and subways can carry a greater number of people than cars; hence, the more people use public transportation, the fewer cars would be on the road, which means the less congestion. When governments develop more train and subway lines, we will have an integrated public transport system which may encourage more people to use public transportation. As a result, this solution can reduce traffic congestion. The other reason is that road accidents are the main cause of traffic congestion. Since trains and subways use dedicated tracks, there would be lower number of accidents. Therefore, traffic jams could be reduced.

On the other hand, roads should be built more and wider. The first reason for this opinion is that roads are too narrow in cities when population and traffic flow are increasing. Therefore, during rush hours, traffic jams are unavoidable. If roads are wider, they could ease the flow of traffic, which could prevent traffic congestion. Another reason for this opinion is that new roads are necessary when new residential areas have been built. With these new roads, people will have more routes to choose to get home after work. This could reduce the traffic volume for one single route.

In conclusion, there are good reasons why governments should spend money on developing public transport system such as train or subway lines, but building more new roads or widening the roads is also necessary, especially in developing cities.