Ielts writing task 2 -pls help me fix it :X:X

1/ The internet allow us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements?.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

It is argued that internet techonology helped people connect with their relatives and friends without having a boundary of distance and cost, otherwise many people think that the internet has negatively affected to people’s social life.However,if we use the internet in a clever way , it would bring us numerous advantages.

Thanks to the advancement in technology ,people are facing with social life problems these days.Mostly people spend their time for browsing the mobile phone such as Facebook,Instagram..etc with the appealing applications many people tend to live in their own world , they are less interact with their families and others people. Addition to, everybody abuse it excessively made them gradually static and no more motion . This is lead to increasing healthy problems for instance aches and pains, diabetes.etc.

On the other hand, I can not deny that Internet would give us a lot of benificial things if it is used wisely in the right purpose for mankind. Firstly, due to the existence of the internet has changed the way of people interact and correspond with electronic email and social networking .It only takes about a second for delivery and receive. People could communicate and link with others people in a effectively way. Secondly, the internet could also help people keep in touch with friends by using social networking such as Facebook, Linkedin.. They can share memories and update the latest news . Internet can maintain and connect people closer and closer , they could be used for online business.Hence, it depends on the users how wise they use it.

In conclusion, online technology could be harmful for some people social life. I do believe that internet could be bring a lot of benefits for individuals and societies if people use it smartly and do not overuse it inapporciately.