IELTS Writing Task 2. Please give me some feedback on this essay. Thank you so much.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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In this information age, computers play an integral part in our lives. Opinion are divided regarding whether we should introduced this useful gadgets into school systems or not. While many people think the introduction of computers in classroom has some certain downsides for the students, I firmly believe that computer is beneficial for both teachers and learners due to their helpful programs and the ability to access to the Internet of them.

On the one hand, using computer in classroom can spoil the students. Once some students find out the massive amount of material that exists on the internet, they may plagiarise the work of other people there and hand in that work to their lecturers. This action can benefits them in the short term, in the form of flying marks, but show opposite impacts in the long term. Depending on the work of other people brings in its wake the lack of creativity and analytical skills in these students, therefore they will not achieve anything despite going to schools for a long time.

On the other hand, computers brings about many advantages in academic environment. First, teachers can use the computers and their programs to deliver the lessons better. Many office applications, such as Power Point and Words, allow teachers to illustrate the lesson in a more interesting way, which can spark interests among students, thus, make them learn better and remember more effectively. Second, despite several disadvantages relating to plagiarism, Internet is a powerful place to gain deeper insight for the students. The wide variety of sources in the internet can do wonder to the academic performances of students since they can expose to many things, which do not convered in the books, and gain a lot of experiences from the formers.

In conclusion, although computers may result in the dependence of the students, I think that applying computers in school can enhance the quality of teaching in schools, as well as bring about the betterment in studying to students.