Ielts Writing Task 2- Please give me some feedback on my writing

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is believed that you should use to dealing with bad situations such as unsatisfactory jobs or shortage of money, while there are other people thinking that it is better to try to overcome the problems and improve your life. Although accepting bad situations seems to be good enough for most people, I prefer trying to change the bad conditions.

Accepting bad things seems to be more comfortable and better for many people because in their cases, standing still is the best thing they can do. For instance, in case of people who live in areas which have economic downturns, it is not their choice whether to have better living conditions or not, in fact, if they want to fight for a good condition, it will be too risky for them. Therefore, they have to go with the flow and do their best to survive. In addition, people may have a happier life where they do not suffer anxiety about nice houses and high salaries. This means that choosing to live with bad situations is not always a bad choice.

On the other hand, I still rather try hard to change the conditions. This is due to the fact that you can create some targets in your life, which makes you feel how worthy your life is. If you live a life without things you want to achieve, it will be boring day after day. Furthermore, if there had been no one fight for a better future, many great creations such as electricity, light bulbs, the Internet would not have been made. This sets a good example and helps you know that you can achieve your goals if you try hard enough.

In conclusion, dealing with bad situations is not a bad choice. However, fighting for better conditions will give you more joys of life and also create chances to reach the target.