Ielts writing task 2. please fix it!

Task 2: There are more workers who work from home and more students who study from home. This is because computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Working and studying at home are become more common. It is due to the fact that computer technology is more accessible and affordable. Persnnally, I think it is a positive development. This essay will make this viewpoint clear

This trend con bring to the people who follow it many benefits. Firstly, People do not have to travel, so they can save time, fuel cost and travelling cost. secondly, It can reduce the air pollution and traffic burden specially at rush hours. In addition, Many people especially the wives can arrange schedule for study and work effectively like the mother can take care her chidren and work at the same time.

this trend also bring many benefits to the schools and companies. Schools and companies can reduce telephones, electricity and water bills. they also do not have to buy and fix the facilities. Moreover, The money which is saved can contribute volunteer activities likes protect the environment, donate money and clothes for homeless people.

Nowaday, there are more and more people who work and study at home. It is due to the accessibility of affordable computer technology. I think it is necessary for most societist nowaday