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Nowadays young people spend too much of their life in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. Do u agree or disagree?

In today world, consumption market are developing faster and faster, young adults were attracted the most. They spend almost free time in malls with friends, in my perspective, the negative outweigh the positive to themselves and their social life.

First of all, the demand of entertainment are increasing, especially in teenagers because they can easily go to cinema, game center, also have free wifi and air-conditioner in hot summer. If these children wasting time in such places for long time can become a shopaholic and put their parents under pressure of finance or even worst such as debt. When they can not buy things more they could steal as obsession for news items from famous brands and there is a chance that will become their habit and difficult to change

In addition, they will have lest time for outside activities, team-building works or sports, this will leds to many problem about academic at schools. Moreover, food in this place are usually unhealthy, sugar and fat from fast food and soft drinks have bad influences to their mental health and maybe cause ill like obesity. All the issue above will leave serious consequences for society in future if do not be solve.

In conclusion, I believe that there are variety disadvantages effect individuals, family and even the society if young people keep wasting too much time in shopping malls. Do u want your children addicted in shopping or maybe become a thief and make the society worst and worst then ever?