Ielts Writing Task 2: Junk food
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Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is true that consuming too much junk food has negative effects on the human body. While some people argue that education can not alleviate the problem, I believe that people can get out of this bad habit if they are properly educated.
On the on hand, educating people to cut down their junk food consumption is difficult for various reasons. From the physiological perspective, eating fatty food leads to human brain releasing chemicals associating with the feeling of pleasure. This may result in people becoming addictive, and it is challenging to alter this kind of behavior. On the psychological level, junk food are quick to prepare, tasty and more importantly convenient, which is eminently suitable for modern people who are occupied with work or study. These people may have some awareness of the damage caused by this unhealthy eating habit, but they do not consider it as a prime concern.
On the other hand, I would argue that the proper and long-lasting education can raise people’s awareness of junk food and encourage them to adopt a healthier lifestyle. A possible method is that school and parents provide children lessons about basic nutrients, the method of healthy eating and the hidden damage of fast food from a young age. This preparation aids adults in shaping younger generation’s behavior, leading to a healthy eating habit in the future. Another approach could be the government regularly display warnings about junk food or advice on eating healthy. This repetitive educational method give people constant exposure to their eating problem, re-prioritizing their concerns to put more of an emphasis on health, the hidden but important aspect of life.
In conclusion, while it seems to be challenging to reduce people’s junk food consumption, I believe that by adopting efficient educational methods, this problem can be solved.
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- It is true that [ or: I agree that ] consuming too much junk food has negative effects on the human body.
- While some people argue that education can not [ almost always written as one word: cannot ] alleviate the problem, I believe that people can get out of this bad [ 'get out of' comes across a informal: avoid 'get' if possible in formal writing -> overcome/eliminate this ...
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- From the physiological perspective, eating fatty food leads to human brain releasing chemicals associating [ associated ] with the feeling of pleasure.
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