IELTS WRITING TASK 2. Hope you check it for me

Writing Task 2: The Internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

My essay:

The internet is desperately common nowadays and is still sensational news that people debate. Some point of view assumes that Internet provides a lot of benefits for people in every aspect of life, on the other hand, the small number of people do not agree with these opinions. Following my perspective, We should be used internet in today's society because the positive effect that it bring to life is very enormous.
Firstly, many people say that Internet has too many negative aspects nowadays. A typical example is It distract concentrated people while they are working so that induce lost productivity. In additional, Not all things on the Internet are accepted by social and the data in some websites still was not heavily censor such as for politics, sexual and medical information. There are many harms to health when people expose with computers for a long time, as a way to destroy health following the time.
However, social networking has many advantage points in order to utilize in purposes. With the blowing up of information, we need one instrument to approach with information, find out tremendous data and cooperate with the development of human. It's useful for everyone to unwind after the stress from work, family or whatever, perhaps some games or a few conversations and maybe some pictures will help mental better. Website usually engrosses lots of people's participation so making friend is simpler than that before and if people using with appropriate way, the benefit is incredible.
In conclusion, I believe that although there are disadvantages to internet in life, people should be able to use it.