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Lilwilly Posted 12 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
IELTS writing task 2 correction.
Dear friends,
I am going to take the IELTS exam next week, therefore I need your help with the writing task 2. Here is an essay that I have answered. could you please have a look at it and suggest ways of improvements.
thank you
Willy
1. Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?
Give reasons for your answer.
Throughout the years, the importance of free speech has been considered as basic and valuable characteristics of many societies. Freedom of speech enables people to speak their minds whenever they disagree with authority’s unfavorable actions. However, in some societies, people are not allowed to speak freely due to the suppression of their governments. Although, some people do not agree with the idea of free speech society, I believe that in every country people should be given the right to speak freely for two main reasons.
Firstly, negative actions of governments can come to an end when people are free to criticize their government. In other words, unfavorable actions can be deterred by the people of the country if those people are allowed to speak freely. For instance, in a free speech society, if a government wishes to amend a section of the country’s constitution which in not for the good of the people and the country, people can stand against such amendment if they feel that it is not favorable. This is one reason why I think societies ought to be free to express their ideas.
Secondly, in a free speech society, people can exchange their views and opinions with no fear of their authorities. In addition, people can speak their without being scared of any kind of punishment or suppression by the authorities. For example, during election, people can express their views if they are against the expected future ruler of the country.
In conclusion, freedom of speech is an important element particularly to criticize governments’ unwanted actions as well as to have a free-fear life. Therefore, I strongly support the idea of having free speech societies.
I am going to take the IELTS exam next week, therefore I need your help with the writing task 2. Here is an essay that I have answered. could you please have a look at it and suggest ways of improvements.
thank you
Willy
1. Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?
Give reasons for your answer.
Throughout the years, the importance of free speech has been considered as basic and valuable characteristics of many societies. Freedom of speech enables people to speak their minds whenever they disagree with authority’s unfavorable actions. However, in some societies, people are not allowed to speak freely due to the suppression of their governments. Although, some people do not agree with the idea of free speech society, I believe that in every country people should be given the right to speak freely for two main reasons.
Firstly, negative actions of governments can come to an end when people are free to criticize their government. In other words, unfavorable actions can be deterred by the people of the country if those people are allowed to speak freely. For instance, in a free speech society, if a government wishes to amend a section of the country’s constitution which in not for the good of the people and the country, people can stand against such amendment if they feel that it is not favorable. This is one reason why I think societies ought to be free to express their ideas.
Secondly, in a free speech society, people can exchange their views and opinions with no fear of their authorities. In addition, people can speak their without being scared of any kind of punishment or suppression by the authorities. For example, during election, people can express their views if they are against the expected future ruler of the country.
In conclusion, freedom of speech is an important element particularly to criticize governments’ unwanted actions as well as to have a free-fear life. Therefore, I strongly support the idea of having free speech societies.
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Your English is quite good; it has a few slips you'll want to comb through and spot. ) In regard to the content, I'd suggest something different. The need for 'free speech' to curtail a government only exists where people cannot choose a good government .
- Your English is quite good; it has a few slips you'll want to comb through and spot.
- ) In regard to the content, I'd suggest something different.
- The need for 'free speech' to curtail a government only exists where people cannot choose a good government .
- Currently, for example, whilst people are given the choice of a few parties, all of them are generally felt to be undesirable, which means that despite the word 'free' and 'election', it's not any such thing.
- If it were free, people would be able to vote for what they had a high opinion of.
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Your English is quite good; it has a few slips you'll want to comb through and spot. (On this forum I generally avoid fixing letters where those letters should be reflecting a person's ability.)
In regard to the content, I'd suggest something different.
The need for 'free speech' to curtail a government only exists where people cannot choose a good government. Currently, for ex
In regard to the content, I'd suggest something different.
The need for 'free speech' to curtail a government only exists where people cannot choose a good government. Currently, for ex
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