IELTS WRITING TASK 2. Can you please check my essay? Thank you for your help

Task 2: Some people think that governments should give financial support to
creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists
should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own
opinion.
My essay:

People have different views about the funding of creative artists. While some people
disagree with the idea of government support for artists, I believe that money for art
projects should come from both governments and other sources.
Some art projects definitely require help from the state. In the UK, there are many
works of art in public spaces, such as streets or squares in city centres. In Liverpool,
for example, there are several new statues and sculptures in the docks area of the
city, which has been redeveloped recently. These artworks represent culture,
heritage and history. They serve to educate people about the city, and act as
landmarks or talking points for visitors and tourists. Governments and local councils
should pay creative artists to produce this kind of art, because without their funding
our cities would be much less interesting and attractive.
On the other hand, I can understand the arguments against government funding for
art. The main reason for this view is that governments have more important
concerns. For example, state budgets need to be spent on education, healthcare,
infrastructure and security, among other areas. These public services are vital for a
country to function properly, whereas the work of creative artists, even in public
places, is a luxury. Another reason for this opinion is that artists do a job like any
other professional, and they should therefore earn their own money by selling their
work.
In conclusion, there are good reasons why artists should rely on alternative sources
of financial support, but in my opinion government help is sometimes necessary.