IELTS Writing Task 2. Can you give me some reviews and comments? Thank you.

Topic: In modern world­, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products, such as medicines and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?

My answer:

In the 21st century, some people argue that we now have various elements and substances which can replace animals to produce food and also supply to the medical and garment industry. From my viewpoint, I partially agree with this opinion.

On the one hand, it is true to say that things made from animals can bring some results that others can’t do, especially food. The fact is people need to be provided with enough nutrients to live a fit and healthy life. For example, protein, which is an important ingredient to the human body, is hardly found in substitute materials for meat such as green vegetables. The elements which exist in animals help us to make more delicious cuisines, more salutary medicines, and also more durable, better fabrics.

On the other hand, the abuse of consuming animals to manufacture things can put some threats to their life. For instance, several endangered species have been killed each year to make high-priced drugs and extravagant interior decorations such as rhino’s horn and elephant’s ivory. With the rapid growth of technology, scientists now can mix different substances to create things that have similar tastes and quality of meat which will reduce indiscriminate and illegal hunting.

All things considered, animals have many features and characteristics that others don’t have to make a plentiful product for serving our demands. Nevertheless, the utilization of animals for creating daily necessities should be limited but not stop using them to avoid bad effects and save some species from extinction.