IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree? / To what extent do you agree or disagree? There is a school of thought saying that not only do organizations focus on maximizing their profits but they also carry certain social obligations. Personally, I totally agree with this perspective given the inextricable relationship between the growth of firms and community, and the way the former manifests this social duty. The cogent reason why I believe that businesses have social responsibilities and earn profits simultaneously is the interdependent link between businesses and society in terms of development. The case of large tech companies perfectly exemplifies the community’s dependence on businesses. Undoubtedly, if tech firms focus on quality and sell high-quality technological gadgets, the users will less likely suffer injuries coming from technical issues. By the same token, were the public uneducated on the harmful effects of fuel-powered vehicles, the automobile industry could not thrive and earn such extensive revenues. Thus, without the purpose of benefiting the public, businesses cannot proliferate.A further rationale for my belief that companies have social responsibilities is that they benefit society in several aspects. First, businesses are legally required to pay taxes to contribute to society; otherwise, evading taxes would be equivalent to their refusal to obey the law, resulting in serious punishments. Second, they are also conducive to the community by creating job opportunities, enabling individuals to earn an income to afford their needs. Indeed, job creation can also help alleviate poverty and curb unemployment rates.  In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree with the idea that besides gaining revenues, those profit-making organizations are also accountable for fulfilling their corporate social responsibility, considering the relationship between businesses and society, as well as how the former impacts the latter.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

You did not understand this topic. It is about companies contributing to the community beyond the minimum legal requirements. It is not about job creation or paying taxes, because that is legal, not social, responsibility.

For example, a company that takes its social responsibilities seriously will support the local museums, theaters and the school system and medical facilities. It will donate money to causes which will improve the lives of all community members, not just their direct employees. It will sponsor festivities and celebratory events to raise community spirit. It might sponsor a football team to help young people learn sports, get exercise and have a good time. It will provide higher wages and benefits than is required and be very sensitive to their employees' needs for healthcare and childcare. It will act responsibly to protect the local air and water quality, and dispose of waste in an environmentally-safe manner.

There is a school of thought (That is not what a native speaker would write. A "school of thought" is usually associated with a group of philosophers with a common set of principles.) saying that not only do should organizations focus on maximizing their profits but they also have ~~carry~~ certain social obligations. Personally, I totally agree with this ~~perspective~~ given the inextricable relationship between the growth of firms and community, and the way the former (wrong usage - former refers to "growth") manifests this social duty.(not a natural phrase. I do not understand your meaning. Write clearly instead of trying to use sophisticated language. How is the growth of firms related to a community? They are two very different things. )

The c~~ogent~~ reason why I believe that businesses have both social responsibilities and the objective / goal to earn profits ~~simultaneously~~ is the interdependent link between businesses and society in terms of development. (I don't know what you mean. Do you mean that the customers of the business are in the local community? Often that is not the case.) The case of large tech companies perfectly exemplifies the community’s dependence on businesses. Undoubtedly, if ~~tech~~ firms focus on quality and sell high-quality products ~~technological gadgets,~~ (unnatural phrase) the users will less likely suffer injuries coming from technical issues. (I do not understand this. What injuries will I suffer if my smartphone has some software problem?) By the same token, were the public uneducated on the harmful effects of fuel-powered vehicles, the automobile industry could not thrive and earn such extensive revenues. Thus, without the purpose of benefiting the public, businesses cannot proliferate. (You do not understand this topic. )

A further rationale for my belief that companies have social responsibilities is that they benefit society in several aspects. (Paying taxes is not the topic. That is a government requirement, not a social responsibility) First, businesses are legally required to pay taxes ~~to contribute to society~~; otherwise, evading taxes would be equivalent to their refusal to obey the law, resulting in serious punishments. Second, they ~~are also conducive~~ to benefit the community by creating job opportunities, enabling individuals to earn an income to afford their needs. Indeed, job creation can also help alleviate poverty and curb unemployment rates.
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree with the idea that besides gaining revenues, those profit-making organizations are also accountable for fulfilling their corporate social responsibility, considering the relationship between businesses and society, as well as how the former impacts the latter.

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