Ielts writing task 2

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Topic: In some countries people who are unemployed receive a sum of money each week in the from of a benefit. While some support this, others believe that this money should not be given. Discuss both these views and give your personal view.

It is true that in many parts of the world the employed live on the dole of the government. Some people believe that is a good thing while others say that this money should not be given. This essay will analyze both attitudes before I give my personal view.

On the one hand, people hold the view that giving the allowance to the jobless is a good thing. First of all, we can share their financial burden. In other words, with this money, they could pay taxes and cover their daily expenditure. Thanks to this, they have more opportunity to find another job.Besides, society reduce crime and social evils. To be more precise, because of the lack of money, unemployed people will try every way to earn money, even do bad professions. Consequently crime and social evil rise accelerate considerably.

One the other hand, other people restrict that government provide the unemployment benefit for people who are out of work. To begin with, they will become lazy and do not want to find another job. In other words, they think they could depend on a supply of money from the government to live to the end of life without working. As a result, they still remain jobless. Furthermore, in poor nations, it would be an impossible task. To be more precise, these countries have such a limited budget to support for unemployed people. Obviously, youngsters must train themselves hard when they still at school unless they want to be the jobless in the future. In conclusion, there are different views towards this issue. My personal view is that the government would rather assist money for unlucky fate than jobless people.