IELTS Writing Task 2

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Topic: It is true that the governments should invest in promotive measures that encourage a healthy lifestyle of residents rather than wasting money on curing people suffering from illnesses. There are good arguements both for and against this, but I believe it depends on different reasons.

I completely agree with the idea that individuals should be facilitated to enhance awareness of a healthy lifestyle, which not only does it improve people's lives but it also contribute to the development of society. The first prominent justification is that enhanced awareness of healthy lifestyle, individuals may avoid from diseases such as heart disease, stroke and diabetes which may result in a wide range of positive effects on Ministry of Healthy's budgets. For instand, instead of pouring a large amount of money on researching and developing new medicines for patients, the government just spend a reasonable amount which is far lower than that of treatment to rasing people's awareness of healthy lifestyle and diminish the number of patients suffering from those diseases. Secondly, there is no doubt that prevention is better than cure since not only does disease precention save people's money, living healthily enable individuals enjoy life and do more other meaningful things such as study, travel, etc. Finally, there are many things than engaging in passive resistant, which means that the more initiatively the government acts in health battle, the faster the government boost the development of that society.

However, I believe that paying attentions and having policies for treatment of people suffeing from illnesses should not be overlooked by the governments. Firstly, it cannot deny that together with the development of society, diseases also have their own change and evolution and its development and consequences have threatened hapiness and peace of many families. As a result, being infected from totally strange disease such as H5N1 or SAT is enivitable, and imagine that if the government do not invest a proper budget on developing treatment for those disease, how worse it would be. Furthermore, it is obvious that if those patients are not healed, not only do the patients suffer from sadness, but their family will be sorrowing after them, which may cause adverse effects on many aspects of society, economy, etc. Last but not least, although everyone should be treated equally and as long as they are residents living in a certain country, they have rights to receive treament for their health situation.

In conclusion, while reasons can be given to justify that promoting a healthy lifestyle seems to be more important than treatment of people who are suffering from illnesses, and the governmen bodies should spend more budget on promotive measures for healthy lifestyle, I believe this is not an accurate statement under any circumstance.