IELTS Writing Task 2

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Topic: Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university.

Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

My essay:

In today’s world, there has been an accelerating trend for students to work for a period of time rather than going straight to university. While this is beneficial to some extent, but I believe that it is also drawbacks.

On the one hand, working before university is that it gives young people a chance to save money and it has the deferment of study enables students to enrich themselves with real-life experiences. These may include being employed as an unskilled worker, from which those who have just entered adulthood may learn the precious value of each coin earned. As students often need to buy expensive books and other supplies, they normally work part-time at university to cover these costs but if they have savings, they will have more time to focus on their studies. Another benefit is that it allows young people to gain valuable experience. This can help them to develop soft skills, such as teamwork, which can help them at university. Secondly, they can leverage their experience at job interviews once they have completed their studies.

On the other hand, there are also a lot of troubles occurring when taking a gap year. If students take a gap year, they probably lose momentum for studying. If they have a considerable break after studying, it is quite hard for them to get back into the hard-studying habit. Consequently, it is important for them to think about whether they should take a break and how long it will be. Additionally, the cost is always an important factor. Moreover, to the youngsters without firm determination, a life without the discipline of formal schooling can be extremely addictive; and they may decide not to further their study after the gap year.

In conclusion, I think there are an upside and downside to working before university. The decision seems to depend entirely on one’s goals and circumstances so young people should consider their own situation before making a choice.