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Sanyha2002 Posted 8 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Ielts Writing Task 2

Some people say that online learning is the most effective and convenient way to learn.

Others say that online learning will never be as effective as learning at a real school, in person.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Some people say that online learning is the most effective and convenient way to learn. I agree with a bit of this idea, it is helpful, convenient way to learn but I think it isn’t the most.


In my opinion, in modern and develop like today, use Internet or online which is used popularly at the present and I think not only at the present, but also in the future, it will still common all over the world. Internet which is a thing that we can use to learn, to work, to search even almost anything we want to know.


It is very useful to learn by online but in fact sometimes for example we can not understand a lesson clearly and we on the Internet but we can not find or sometimes we don’t know what we will search on the Internet because we don’t have structure of the lesson or steps of exercises.


Teachers who almost have experience to teach you and give you some the structures and you can easier to understand than you search or find information by yourself. So, I think we you study at a real school, not only teachers help you but also have a lots of friends to help you. And I can see that if we go to school, we can add a lot of friends, join a lots of activities that are organized by your school, improve your interactive skills when we interact with a lots of types of personality of a lot of people at school and so on. Therefore, we will have memory of the period of student time when we leave school and go to another higher school or university or anywhere, we will still recall that memories. So I think we should respect a second, a minute to study at school.


In addition, I think it is effective to learn at real school, in a person and the Internet or online just should be used as a machine to help more for your study.

  

Top answer

Your sentences are too verbose and long winded. You repeat the same phrase (a lot of) many times. Writing long sentences causes you to make a lot of mistakes.

  • Your sentences are too verbose and long winded.
  • You repeat the same phrase (a lot of) many times.
  • Writing long sentences causes you to make a lot of mistakes.
  • You do not write proper structures for all clauses: subject-verb-object.
  • Learn about the comma splice error and how to avoid this mistake.
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Your sentences are too verbose and long winded. You repeat the same phrase (a lot of) many times.
Writing long sentences causes you to make a lot of mistakes. You do not write proper structures for all clauses: subject-verb-object. Learn about the comma splice error and how to avoid this mistake.



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