IELTS writing task 1 the major (MRT) systems around the world

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The table below provides statistics on several major metro (MRT) systems around the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant (at least 150 words).

The given table illustrates the data of age, scale and yearly carrying capacity in six noticeable metro systems in the global.

Overall, we can see that the recently metro systems are significant shorter than previous ones.

First of all, standing at 1100 km, London MRT systems is the longest and also the oldest as it has completed in 1863. Following this, the Paris underground started operating in 1890 and it is the second oldest system with 594 kilometres in length. The most recently metro system was built in Los Angeles in 2001 with 14 kilometres in length. Finally, completed in 1980 with 11 kilometres in length so Kyoto metro system was the shortest.

Besides, there was a significant improvement in construction of the metro system in Tokyo which is seen the highest annual carrying capacity compare to other systems, at 1434 million. Standing at the second and the third position about the annual carrying capacity are Paris and London system, at 850 and 548 million respectively. Standing at the last position, is still Kyoto system, transporting just 11 million passengers per year.

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The ~~given~~ table lists / gives / provides illustrates ("illustrate" means "make a picture". It is not a good verb for graphs, charts, plots and tables. These types of figures are not pictures. It is a good word for maps, images, diagrams and flow charts.) the data of ~~age~~, scale (wrong word) and yearly carrying capacity in six noticeable (wrong word) metro systems in the global. (wrong word. Global is an adjective. You cannot use an adjective as the object of a preposition.)

Your paragraph is incomplete. What are the six cities? What countries are they in?

Overall, ~~we can see that~~ (Do not write phrases and clauses that do not describe the information. Don't waste words.) the recently (wrong word. Recently is an adverb. You cannot use an adverb to modify a noun. ) metro systems are significant shorter than the others. ~~previous ones~~.

First of all, standing at 1100 km, London MRT systems (There is only one in London.) is the longest and also the oldest as it has completed (wrong verb form. e..g. I have completed my homework. What did the system complete?) in 1863. Following this, the Paris underground started operating in 1890 and it is the second oldest system with a length of 594 kilometres ~~in length~~. The most recently (wrong word. ) metro system was built in Los Angeles in 2001, ~~with~~ 14 kilometres in length. Finally, completed in 1980 with a length of 11 kilometres, ~~in length~~ so Kyoto metro system was the shortest.

Besides, ~~there was a significant improvement in construction of~~ (The table does not give that information. Only report the data. Do not draw any conclusions or inferences. Do not give opinions.) the metro system in Tokyo which ~~is seen~~ has the highest annual carrying capacity compare (wrong verb form) to other systems, at 1434 million. Standing at the second and the third position ~~about~~ in the annual carrying capacity are Paris and London system, at 850 and 548 million respectively. Standing at the last position, is ~~still~~ Kyoto system, transporting just 11 million passengers per year.

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