IELTS writing task 1 the development of a school

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes in 2024

The two maps illustrate a potential proposal for a school in order to meet the rising demand of its students over the period 2004 to 2004.

Overall, the school experiences significant changes including is the appearance of the third school building and the second car park.

In 2004, The school had only two school buildings and a car park, which was enough space to accommodate with 600 students. Besides, two school buildings were separated by a path running from main entrance in the west to sports field in the east of the school site.

In 2024, it is predicted that the school will be considerable refurbishment to cater for 1000 students. That is why the sports field will be relocated to make way for the appearance of a new school building and a new car park next to it. Therefore, the sport field will also be decreased in size and relocated to the its south. In addition, vehicles can be moving to the second car park by a new road from main entrance. Finally, the plan is to join the two original school buildings together and they will be connected to the third building by the original path way.