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Writing task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding.Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.You should write at least 150 words. my answer :The following picture illustrates the processes of how houses can be vulnerable to flooding.The picture shows that the there is a building between the stopbank and the internal runoff produced by the rain which forms a small amount of water as a thin layer above the ground as internal ponding. The stopbank is in the shape of a pyramid with the top most level consisting of a free board while the bottom part which is below the ground is known as the flood gate with the right end side being the berm. The right side of the stopbank is shown to be stopping a 100 year old flood level of water.When there is a lack of a stopbank, the 100 year flood level passes through and envelops the pillars that hold up the building. the water is also 300mm above the ground level.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

You wrote 145 words. The minimum is 150 You lose points for that.

The following picture illustrates the processes (wrong word. There are no processes - flow charts - in this diagram. Use process only when there are sequences of steps being performed.) of how houses can be vulnerable to flooding. (That is not what the diagram shows. If a house is vulnerable to flooding, it means that in certain times of heavy rain, high tide, or river overflow, water can get inside.)

The picture shows that the there (ungrammatical) is a building between the stopbank and the internal runoff produced by the rain which forms a small amount of water as a thin layer above the ground as internal ponding. (That is a very poor sentence. ) The stopbank is in the shape of a pyramid (wrong word. A pyramid is a three-dimensional solid with triangular sides. A stopbank is not a pyramid. Besides, "stopbank" is a word specific to New Zealand dialect of English. I have never heard it before. It is not American or British English. The normal words are dike (British: "****") , embankment, or levee. ) with the top most level consisting of a free board while the bottom part which is below the ground is known as the flood gate with the right end side being the berm. The right side of the stopbank is shown to be stopping a 100 year old flood level (That is not correct. Scientists called hydrologists predict the maximum height of floodwaters that ight occur once in a period of 100 years. This is called the 100-year floodplain.) of water.

When there is a lack of a stopbank, the 100 year flood level passes through and envelops the pillars that hold up the building. the water is also 300mm above the ground level. (That is not a good sentence.)

You did not do a good job of describing this diagram. There is not a "main features" paragraph. You will lose points for that.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Sample essay: ~190 words

The diagram illustrates two ways in which buildings near a river can be protected from flooding during periods of high water.

In general, there are two situations: first, where the river has an embankment or dike, and second, where there is no such man-made defensive system. In first case, buildings have to be raised on short pillars higher than the expected internal ponding, and in the other situation the floor of the building must be raised on high stilts.

In detail, a dike protects the land from being inundated by occasional river floods. Earthen dams are constructed along the river's edge, higher than the 100-year flood level. This additional height is called the freeboard, and is shown in this illustration as 300 mm.. At the base of the dike, there is a floodgate to allow local rain runoff to drain into the river. There will be some internal ponding from rainwater, and houses need to be raised above that level. In areas not protected by a dike, the buildings must be put on stilts which are the height of the hundred-year flood plus the freeboard.

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