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The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.

Age group	Female	Male
0 – 9	51.3	50.3
10 – 17	42.2	24.6
18 – 39	17.1	9.7
40 – 59	12.3	8.0
60+	18.5	13.2

The table illustrates the proportion of people for both genders by age groups in a town who cycled in 2011.

Overall, it is evident that in all the age groups, the percentage of female cyclist was higher than male cyclist. Meanwhile, for both genders, the proportion of population in the age between 18 and 59 was the lowest.

To begin with, just over half of all male and female children under 9 years old riding bicycle. For girl in the age from 10-17, their proportion decreased slightly to almost 40%, whereas, the percentage of boy cyclist in the same age declined by over half to less than 25%.

Moreover, the figures among both genders aged 18-39 and 40-59 were the lowest. In the former age group, only approximately 17% of female cyclist, compared to almost 10% of man cyclist. Also, in the latter age group, about 12% of female riding bicycles in comparison with exactly 8% of male cyclist.

Moving to the age of higher than 60 years old, the percentage of both woman and man cyclist had a sudden increase to reach 18.5% and just more than 13% respectively.

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