IELTS Writing Task 1 Mixed graph

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I heard that this kind of graph might appear in IELTS Task 1, hope you correct my writing!-------------------------------The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visitThe line graph compares the number of UK visitors and the number of UK people who visited other countries from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows countries that were favored most by UK travellers in 1999.In general, the amount of UK's overseas visitors and UK people travelling abroad both increased during the period. In addition, France and Spain had far more UK visitors compared with other countries in 1999.In 1979, only 10 million foreign people visited the UK. However, this figure began to rise gradually as it almost reached 20 million in 1989 and nearly 30 million in 1999. Meanwhile, there were about 13 million UK residents visiting other countries in 1979. This number increased to 20 million in 1985 and from then it rose sharply to over 50 million in 1999.In 1999, France was the most popular destination for UK travellers, with about 11 million of them visited this country. Spain, which had nearly 10 million visitors from the UK, was the second popular country for UK people. Three other countries: the USA, Greece and Turkey, only had about 4 million, 3 million and 2 million UK visitors, respectively.

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The line graph compares the number of ~~UK visitors~~ (???) foreigners who visited the UK and the number of UK people who visited other countries from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows countries that had the highest numbers of ~~were favored most by~~ UK travellers from the UK in 1999.

(Both the graph and the chart have the same units of measure. That is very important.

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In general, the numbers in both groups ~~amount of UK's overseas visitors and UK people travelling abroad~~ ~~both~~ increased steadily during the period. In addition, France and Spain had far more UK visitors compared with other countries in 1999.

(You missed a very significant main feature)

In 1979, only 10 million foreign residents / foreigners ~~foreign people~~ visited the UK. However, the number / it ~~this figure~~ (wrong word) began to rise gradually reaching nearly ~~as it almost reached~~ 20 million in 1989 and ~~nearly~~ 30 million in 1999. Meanwhile, there were about 13 million UK residents visiting other countries in 1979. This number increased to 20 million in 1985 and from then it rose sharply to over 50 million in 1999. (You need to do better at comparisons!)

In 1999, France was the most popular destination for UK travellers, 11 million of them. ~~with about 11 million of them visited this country.~~ (ungrammatical) Spain, having about 3 million fewer, ~~which had nearly 10 million visitors from the UK,~~ (very wordy and repetitious) was the second most popular country ~~for UK people~~. Three other countries: the USA, Greece and Turkey, ~~only~~ had about 4 million, 3 million and 2 million UK visitors, respectively.

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Sample essay (~190 words)

Note that the first main feature in the "overall" paragraph, the rising difference between the numbers in these two groups was elaborated in the "detail" paragraph..

The second main feature also had more information in the "detail" paragraph.

That lends coherence and cohesion to the essay.

The line graph and bar chart show numbers of international visitors in two groups, residents of the UK leaving and foreigners coming into the UK. In particular, the graph compares numbers in these groups between 1979 and 1999, while the chart gives the top five countries and their visitor count for the UK residents in 1999.

Overall, there were many more in the UK group than in the overseas group. Although numbers steadily increased over the two decades, the gap between them widened considerably. France and Spain were far more popular destination countries than the USA, Greece and Turkey.

In 1979, there were about 1 million more visitors leaving the UK than entering, 11 million and 10 million respectively. A decade later, that difference had increased by an order of magnitude. Outgoing visitors numbered just over 30 million compared to 20 million arriving. Over the next decade, it more than doubled, 54 to 27 million. For Britishers in 1999, France was the most popular destination with over 11 million tourists, but Spain was a close second, about 2 million less. The other three had less than 4 million each.

IELTS Writing Task 1 Mixed graph

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