IELTS WRITING TASK 1: MAIN REASON FOR MIGRATION

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The pie chart illustrates the main causes for moving to and from United Kingdom in one year 2007.

Overall, it can be seen that the main factor influencing migration was definite job. In addition, the lowest affect both immigration and emigration were different.

According to the chart, had a definite job accounted for 30 per cent of migration to the UK. While this data was very similar for emigration, at 29%. A large number of people, 22%, also emigrated to the UK in order to looking for work. Whereas the percentage of people immigrated was significantly lower, at 12%.

Another considerable element why people move to the UK was formal study with slightly above 20%. In contrast, only 4% for emigration to formal learn.

The figure for accompany/join in both reason were close, at 15% and 13% respectively. There was a noticeable number of people immigrated and emigrated with the reason were no reason started and other. To specify, 6% form the former and 18% from the latter had no reason started. In addition, with other reason accounted for 11% and 14% respectively.