Ielts Writing Task 1 - Line Graph - Steel Industry

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Please help me with my essay. Thank you in advance.Topic: Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The two line graphs depict the domestic need for steel as well as the number of employers working in steel industry in the UK in 2010.In overall, the downward trend for steel supplying was relatively similar to that of customers’ demand and workers number required by steel company.In the first figure, there was a slight rise in the amount of steel manufactured domestically in the first quarter, reaching its peak of 5000 million tons. After that, as the actual demand fluctuated around 2500 point, the manufacturer decided to maintain a production level at 4000 million tons per month in the next three quarters before gradually cutting the quantity to under 1000 in the last quarter.In the second figure, a steep decline in labor employing in steel sector was observed in the first quarter of 2010, with the data plummeting from 5000 to just 3000 people. In the mid-year interval, workers number hovered around 3000 point. This stabilizing trend maintained until August before falling into a sharp decline in the rest of the year.

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The two line graphs depict the domestic need for steel as well as the number of employers (wrong word) working in the steel industry in the UK in 2010. (Your paragraph is very incomplete. The first line graph has two lines. What do they depict? What are the units of measurement? What is on the x-axis? Compare your one-sentence paragraph with this description, which gives a precise description of the figure.

The first line graph depicts the domestic demand and the production volumes of steel from January through December of 2010 in the UK. The units of measure are millions of tonnes. The second line graph plots, for the same time period, the number of people employed in the steel industry.

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In overall, the downward trend for steel supplying (awkward - You did not tell the reader that this measure is on the graph. The reader is confused. ) was ~~relatively similar~~ to that of customers’ demand and workers number (wrong expression) required (wrong word) by steel company. (wrong expression. Which company is shown? )

Example points for "overall" paragraph. I would choose two or three of these for the second paragraph.

The actual demand for steel was the same at the end of the year as it was at the beginning, 2000 million tons.

There was considerable variation in demand over the course of the year; in late November, there was no demand at all, whereas, around March, it peaked at 3000.

In January, the production level was twice as high as demand (4000 versus 2000 million tons).

In December, demand exceeded production by about 1000 million tons.

Production was highly correlated with demand from January to November.

Production levels were much higher (reaching as much as 2500 million tons) than the demand from January until the middle of December, when demand surpassed supply.

In the first graph ~~figure~~, there was a slight rise in the amount of steel manufactured domestically in the first quarter, reaching a ~~its~~ peak of 5000 million tons. After that, as the actual demand fluctuated around 2500 point, (wrong word) the manufacturer (Which one? You did not name a company or a manufacturer) decided to maintain a production level at 4000 million tons per month in the next three quarters before gradually cutting the quantity to under 1000 in the last quarter.

In the second graph ~~figure~~, a steep decline in labor employing (wrong expression) in the steel sector was observed in the first quarter of 2010, with a drop of 40% ~~the data plummeting~~ (wrong expression. Do not use dramatic words like "plummet" in a mathematical description. Those are drama words you can use in Task 2.) from 5000 to just 3000 (Your numbers are incorrect. Look at the graph very carefully.) people. In the mid-year interval, workers number (wrong expression) hovered around 3000 ~~point~~. This stabilizing trend maintained (wrong expression) until August before falling ~~into a sharp decline~~ another 66% to a million workers in December. ~~in the rest of the year.~~

Note:

The steel industry is all the companies that together produce steel. There are several companies in this category in the UK. They do not operate as one unit, making decisions together about production.

Ielts Writing Task 1 - Line Graph - Steel Industry

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