IELTS WRITING TASK 1 LINE GRAPH

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The two line graphs show how ownership of three electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) and amount of time allocated to housework changed from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the proportions of households with electrical appliances rose significantly throughout the period while the number of hours doing housework decreased dramatically.

In the first year of the period, the number of households having refrigerators was barely 0%, after which this figure experienced a steep rise of about 55% in 1940 and continued to grow to reach its peak of 100% in 1980. The figures for refrigerators saw no changes over the last 39 years of the period. The disparity between the figures in 1920 and 1940 was the same in washing machine and vacuum cleaner, at 20%. However, while the former had a small fluctuation in 1980 before hitting the peak of around 75% in 2019, the latter rose stably to 100% in 2000 and remained the same in the next 19 years.

The period from 1920 to 1940 witnessed a sharp decline from 50% to approximately 35% in the amount of time spent on chores (washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning). This was followed by continuous falls to exactly 20% in 2960 and around 15% in 1980. The figure then stayed constant before dropping to 10% in 2019.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The two line graphs show how (What is plotted?) ownership of ~~three~~ electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) and amount of time allocated to housework changed from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the proportions of households with electrical appliances rose significantly throughout the period whil

Overall, the proportions of households with electrical appliances rose significantly throughout the period while the number of hours doing housework decreased dramatically.

In the first year of the period, the number of households having refrigerators was nearly ~~barely~~ 0%, after which this figure (wrong word) experienced (wrong word) a steep rise of about 55% in 1940 and continued to grow to reach ~~its peak of~~ (There is no peak.) 100% in 1980. The figures (wrong word) for refrigerators saw (wrong word) no changes over the last 39 years of the period. The disparity (wrong word. I do not understand what you mean.) between the figures (wrong word) in 1920 and 1940 was the same in washing machine and vacuum cleaner, at 20%. However, while the former had a small fluctuation (wrong word) in 1980 before hitting the peak (wrong word) of around 75% in 2019, the latter rose ~~stably~~ to 100% in 2000 and remained the same in the next 19 years.

The period from 1920 to 1940 witnessed (wrong word) a sharp decline from 50% to approximately 35% in the amount of time spent on chores (washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning). This was followed by continuous falls to exactly 20% in 2960 and around 15% in 1980. The figure (wrong word) then stayed constant before dropping to 10% in 2019.

Please read my advice for Task 1 essays.

It explains misused words like figure, peak, fluctuate, witness, see and experience.

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Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post

Numbers do not see things or have experiences. Neither do years or categories, or other abstract concepts.

Here is an example of numbers that can see, witness and experience. Do you think this is appropriate for a university lecturer in math or science?

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Sample Essay (It is too long but gives you some model sentences.)

The first line graph plots the percentage of homes which have purchased a labor-saving household appliance in a particular country between 1920 and 2019. Three appliances are in the graph: refrigerator, vacuum cleaner and washing machine. The second line graph plots the average amount of time spent weekly on common chores (cooking, cleaning and laundry) per household during the same period.

Overall, more and more families acquired these appliances, especially vacuum cleaners and refrigerators. There is a very strong negative correlation between the percentage of homes with a refrigerator and the number of hours devoted to household chores.

In detail, owning a refrigerator started from nearly none in 1920, but one was present in every home by 1980. About three in ten homes had a vacuum cleaner in 1920, and this also increased to every home by 2000. Washing machines were less prevalent, starting out with the highest ownership of the three, 40%, in 1920, but did not reach 100% as the other two did. Its maximum value was about three-quarters of the homes in 2019. As more and more households acquired these appliances, less and less time was spent on chores. The number of hours per week dropped by 80%, from 50 to 10 hours per week.

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