IELTS Writing Task 1 Line Graph

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Please review it, thank you!The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences of radio and television at each time of the day in the UK from October to December in 1992.Overall, majority of audiences in the UK prefer to listen to radio in the morning whereas most of them watch television in the evening. Over the 24 hours, the proportion of people watching television is more than listening to radio.There was a sharp increase in the percentage of people listening to radio from under 10% to nearly 30% between 6am and 9am. Then, it declined gradually to 2am in the next morning from the highest point to only 1% and remained at that level until it rose again at 5am.Regarding to TV, there was no one watching TV at 6am, then, the percentage of television audiences increased slightly to about 14% at 3pm. Dramatically, that of those climbed to the highest point at approximately 45% at 8pm. However, after 9pm, it fell sharply to under 5% and remained to 6am.

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences (incorrect. That is not what is plotted on the graph. If the total audience was 1000 people, it might plot 40% of them, e.g. 400) of radio and television at each time of the (incorrect expression. That would be a scatter plot of points) day in the UK from October to December in 1992.

Suggested first paragraph:

The line graph plots the percentages of people over 4 years old in the UK who listened to radio (the radio audience) or watched TV (the television audience) as a function of the time of day. The data was taken in the time period October - December 1992. The x-axis shows the time of day, starting at 6 am and continuing to 6 am the next day. The minimum and maximum values on the graph are 0% and 48%.

Overall, (missing word) majority of audiences (wrong expression) in the UK prefer to listen to radio in the morning whereas most of them watch television in the evening. Over the 24 hours, the proportion of people watching television is more than (missing word) listening to radio.

There was a sharp increase in the percentage of people listening to radio from under 10% to nearly 30% between 6am (spacing error) and 9am. Then, it declined gradually to 2am in the next morning from the highest point (what is the highest point?) to only 1% and remained at that level until it rose again at 5am.

Regarding to TV, there was no one watching TV at 6am, then, the percentage of television audiences increased slightly to about 14% at 3pm. Dramatically, that of those (ungrammatical) climbed to the highest point at (approximately 45%) at 8pm. However, after 9pm, it fell sharply to under 5% and remained to 6am.

Comment:

You might have pointed out the issue with the data on this plot.

There is a notable discrepancy in the data between the start and end time points. They should be the same, but they are not. For example, at the 6 am starting point, the TV audience is shown at 0%, but at the end point, also 6 am, it is 5%. There is also a discrepancy in the radio audience data, but it is smaller (3%) than that of the TV data.

More suggestions:

Describe the shapes of the curves.

The curve for TV audiences resembles the composite of three bell curves. The first has a peak of 10% at 10 am, the second, a peak at 1 pm at 15% and the third, a broad peak at 45% from 7 - 10 pm.

The curve for radio audiences is a linear rise at a rate of 6% per hour from 6 am to 9 am, culminating at a peak of 28%, and followed by a slow exponential decay for the remainder of the period. There are minor rises above this trend curve at 4 pm and 11 pm.

Bell curves:

IELTS Writing Task 1 Line Graph

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